So, um, not sure about the etiquette of asking for a beta, but I have a partial draft of a story I'm working on and I've hit well, not an impass, but a point at which I need to decide what to do next. As in, is this a short story? a novella? If someone is willing to read it, I'd be grateful.
I am not having sex with Spike! But I'm starting to think that you might be.
Buffy ,'Dirty Girls'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
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Burrell - Jul 31, 2008 7:40:13 am PDT #438 of 6681
Why did Darth Vader cross the road? To get to the Dark Side!
Amy - Jul 31, 2008 7:43:45 am PDT #439 of 6681
Because books.
I'd be happy to read it, Burrell. Profile address is good.
Burrell - Jul 31, 2008 7:47:13 am PDT #440 of 6681
Why did Darth Vader cross the road? To get to the Dark Side!
Thanks Amy. I'll send it to you shortly. Warning, some notes at the end, you can just ignore them.
Amy - Jul 31, 2008 7:49:03 am PDT #441 of 6681
Because books.
Oh, I do that all the time. Um, make notes where I've stopped, not ignore things people have written.
Burrell - Jul 31, 2008 7:56:01 am PDT #442 of 6681
Why did Darth Vader cross the road? To get to the Dark Side!
heh
Allyson - Jul 31, 2008 8:11:45 am PDT #443 of 6681
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Ugh. I can't write in anyone's voice but mine. I'm going into the second chapter of my children's/middle schooler book about Sam the bat.
Can only write well as a narrative. Fiction is kicking my ass.
Amy - Jul 31, 2008 8:17:01 am PDT #444 of 6681
Because books.
Try imagining that you *are* Sam, Allyson.
Plus, not for nothing, most authors have a particular voice, and no matter what character they create, that voice is going to come through. Sam is part of you, in a way, because he's filtered through your head, your experiences, your emotions.
Also, don't sweat it now. Just keep writing.
I want to write a shelf space drabble, but I'm thinking ranting about my kitchen cabinets probably isn't going to be too interesting.
Burrell - Jul 31, 2008 8:39:59 am PDT #445 of 6681
Why did Darth Vader cross the road? To get to the Dark Side!
Allyson, maybe try writing in 3rd person but through Sam's perspective, as if the narrator were trying to ventriloquize Sam's voice.
Allyson - Jul 31, 2008 9:08:02 am PDT #446 of 6681
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
It's just not working out for me, Burrell. I butchered the first chapter making the effort. I can't make my head switch over.
I'm just doing the narrative. It will sell, or it won't sell. But I'll finish it the way I know how, and try and deal with the fact that it isn't the quality it could be if only I could write it correctly. I know how that sounds, like I'm being defiant to my own detriment.
I also have a writing partner, now. It's working out nicely.
Beverly - Jul 31, 2008 9:18:41 am PDT #447 of 6681
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Allyson, essentially you're telling a story to your nephew, and to any other kids who may be reading the story, or having it read to them. It doesn't have to be Sam's voice. You're the storyteller. Your voice is fine.
Quality has nothing to do with POV, it has to do with the story. And you tell wonderful stories. So please stop doubting your own voice and just tell the story.
I'm glad you have a writing partner, if that's helping you.