Barbra Streisand plays a girl in 19th Century (?) Europe who pretends to be a boy so she can go to a Torah school so she can continue the studies she did with her father, when, as a girl, she's forbidden to study Torah. She falls in love with a guy but has a girl fall in love with her, and I believe the relationship proceeds at least to a betrothal. I don't remember how it ends.

It proceeds to marriage. Yentl has to keep making excuses not to have sex. The girl Yentl marries finally demands sex. (The actress playing Yentl's wife went on to marry Spielberg I think. Radiantly beautiful.) Umm - I liked Yentl, though it has been a long time since I saw it. But then again, I have a Barbra Streisand fetish.

Oh and the end. Yentl reveals that she is a girl. A boy who was having feelings for Yentl is relieved to find out she is not a boy. Yentl heads off for 19th century America, where no doubt she will find a feminist paradise. I forget if the boy marries Yentl's wife or not.

He does.

Um... yeah. It's not much like that. There's much less Torah and much more mad science and trolls.

Well, my agent thought it was a little too much of a good thing and that turning CH 1 into CH 5 introduces the primary incident in that chapter a little too late in the narrative. I see her point even though it means a trip back to the drawing board. I do have a bit of a grace period, however, seeing as she's at the London Book Fair until Wednesday.

::sigh::

I really thought I'd nailed it-- adrenaline rush, I suppose.

Well the nice thing about revising manuscripts in the electronic age, is if you don't like the revision, the old version is right there there to try again with. As someone who started out with typewriters, I still appreciate the invention of word processing, even after all these decades. (Part of it is that I have a minor disability that makes writing legibly extremely hard work, so I learned to touch type at 11. Which now that I think of it, most people probably won't see why that was a big deal because kids now learn to keyboard at the same age they learn to read. Or before. I just made myself feel really old.)

I learned to type on my father's manual Smith Corona. My college manual typewriter is in my storage shed. I may need to arrange to be buried with it.

Gud, Yentl really didn't occur to me, but I think the story sounds great, and I love the use of "Cog" as a name and as a metaphor.

Take your time, Barb, and think about it before you dive in again, especially if you've got a few extra days.

Got my song contest evaluation! It was not woeful, so I need not lie on the floor extraneously. Mid-range scores, with an 8 in imagery/poetics. And the specific breakdown was really helpful; I'm already working out how to incorporate the suggestions into the lyric I'm currently working on.

Liese, that's great news about the feedback!

Gud, I'm looking forward to reading Cog.

I spent so much time revising last week that I'm back feeling like new writing is a reach for me. This plus the pollen make for a determined, slightly foggy, determined thing.

Good luck Barb!