Yeah, I like it, Holli. I want to read it!
Now you can luxuriate in a nice jail cell, but if your hand touches metal, I swear by my pretty flowered bonnet, I will end you.
Mal ,'Our Mrs. Reynolds'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
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Liese S. - Jan 30, 2011 11:59:01 am PST #3985 of 6690
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Holli - Jan 30, 2011 12:25:26 pm PST #3986 of 6690
an overblown libretto and a sumptuous score/ could never contain the contradictions I adore
Yup, it's aimed at a 13/14-year-old reader.
hippocampus - Jan 30, 2011 12:35:41 pm PST #3987 of 6690
not your mom's socks.
It's much clearer to me Holli - really good stuff.
The syntax of
who doesn’t wish she was secretly a fairy princess
Catches me up a bit, but as it's where everything turns, I don't want to pluck at it. Especially if it's just me.
Amy - Jan 30, 2011 12:39:15 pm PST #3988 of 6690
Because books.
I think it might be smoother if it were: "...who doesn't secretly wish."
Ginger - Jan 30, 2011 12:59:26 pm PST #3989 of 6690
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
One thing I'd like to know, Holli, is what the stakes are. "Take on the Winter Court" to do what? Save the kingdom? Save her sister? Get home?
Holli - Jan 30, 2011 1:09:10 pm PST #3990 of 6690
an overblown libretto and a sumptuous score/ could never contain the contradictions I adore
Good point, Ginger. I think that last sentence needs to be "And she’d better do it fast, because she’s got to take on the Winter Court to get her friend back."
Typo Boy - Jan 31, 2011 11:47:56 am PST #3991 of 6690
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
Opinions: When I was growing up there was a publicity rule: "I don't care what you say about me, as long as you spell my name right." That was always an exaggeration, but in the day of the interbunny I kind of feel like that is completely obsolete. I know some people I can send my book to who reach a lot people, who I know will review it if I send, but I also know will give it bad reviews. My instinct: better not to send it to them. Agree? Disagree?
Holli - Jan 31, 2011 5:23:19 pm PST #3992 of 6690
an overblown libretto and a sumptuous score/ could never contain the contradictions I adore
Yeah, I think if the odds of a bad review are that high, it's not worth it.
hippocampus - Feb 01, 2011 8:14:35 am PST #3993 of 6690
not your mom's socks.
Blah. I took an editorial pass at one of my stories yesterday and am now confronted with the horror that is my own self-important tripe. My goal is to have 3 mid-length stories in editing by next week and I'm nearly there, but now I'm squished. I know the only way out of it is through it. But meh.
Gudanov - Feb 02, 2011 7:03:31 am PST #3994 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
Good luck, Sox!
I blogged my new book idea, so now I have to write it. I need to get my query letters done and get those first couple of queries out there so I feel like I can move on to something new.