As long as you can keep it to a page, it doesn't matter much, Gud.
Buffy! If I wanted to fight, you could tell by the being dead already.
Glory ,'Potential'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
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Amy - Jan 26, 2011 6:04:20 am PST #3950 of 6690
Because books.
Barb - Jan 26, 2011 6:21:30 am PST #3951 of 6690
“Not dead yet!”
What Amy said, Gud-- and I like Sox's fixes. It's definitely tight and gets across all the information you need.
Gudanov - Jan 26, 2011 6:42:08 am PST #3952 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
Thanks. I'll be reworking it tonight.
Ginger - Jan 26, 2011 6:47:15 am PST #3953 of 6690
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
Now my editing itch has gotten to me, mostly because "sense of foreboding" was bothering me:
Humanity exists on the brink, hunted by demons and a savage race known as the Fari. Mystical barriers protect the few isolated human enclaves, but their very survival is threatened as the demons increase in number and strength.
That survival rests on Aimee Fallon, an unlikely heroine who spends her days creating magical gadgets. She discovers a mysterious artifact that is the key to stopping the source of the growing demon threat, a corrupting power awakened after centuries of dormancy. With a group led by her mentor, she leaves the safety of the city to try to put that power back to rest. However, Aimee soon discovers that neither friends nor enemies are what she thought they were. She finds herself alone against the new master of the ancient magic, the hostile lands of the wild, and a forbidden lover who suspects her of murdering his kin. The cause seems lost, especially because Aimee doesn’t believe she has a heroic bone in her body. But fate isn’t consulting her.
THE DEAD MOUNTAIN is a 120,000-word tale blending fast-paced adventure, romance, and betrayal. It’s a story in the tradition of epic fantasy, but with a female hero who relies more on her wits and determination than on swinging swords and slinging spells.
Connie Neil - Jan 26, 2011 6:55:52 am PST #3954 of 6690
brillig
I'm very shallow, I admit it, but the last line about wits and determination vs. swords and spells made me plaintively think "but there will be some sword swinging, won't there?" But then my favorite movie genre is Things Blow Up.
Barb - Jan 26, 2011 7:00:33 am PST #3955 of 6690
“Not dead yet!”
Ah, but that's what makes it such a good line for a query, Connie. It lets the agent/editor know that all possibilities exist. That it's NOT just about swords & spells.
Gudanov - Jan 26, 2011 7:16:23 am PST #3956 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
Thanks Ginger.
Fear not for there is sword swinging, it's just not the protagonist's forte. She's more gadget and wits oriented.
Deena - Jan 26, 2011 8:07:05 am PST #3957 of 6690
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Ii'm ready to buy the book, Gud.
Gudanov - Jan 26, 2011 8:31:46 am PST #3958 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
Cool! Now I just need to make it buyable.
-t - Jan 26, 2011 12:01:43 pm PST #3959 of 6690
I am a woman of various inclinations and only some of the time are they to burn everything down in frustration
Eeee, I got my erika issue of EQ! I like the bio, btw.