Sounds complicated, Seska. I hope you find a good solution.
I like to contemplate ideas while I commute or can't sleep (probably not helpful there). The plot is starting to build itself in my head like a movie. I have the MC and two other major characters figured out along with a few minor characters and a bit of dialogue in the second chapter. The night-side civilization I'm seeing as have technology (with no sun they need an energy source) and probably borrowing a bit from steampunk to develop that.
In terms of actual work, I'm moving on to cutting up chapter 14 and seeing if I can find more vivid verbs since it's fairly action-packed. I also read by current revision of chapter 1 and found some repetitive sentence structures, a grammar error, and a couple lines of dialog that have both an attribution and a beat (I can cut words, yay!).
Anyone know in high school these days what the consequence would be for ditching a whole day, parent doesn't know where they are, no excuse?
Amy, from a parental perspective or a school perspective?
It already got answered, Debet, but thanks. I was looking for a school perspective for a plot point.
I'm thinking of adding quotes to the beginning of my chapters but as common as that is I can't find a book on my shelf that does it.
Does this seem punctuated right?
"There is a world outside the Barriers that few ever see. The Wild holds more than demons and the so-called savage Fari; a rich history exists in the ruins of the past. To begin to understand this world, and perhaps even ourselves, one must understand the Farian legend of the Dead Mountain."-- Lady Rachel Payne, A History of the Fari
What is the connection between the things on either side of the semicolon? The ruins of the past are located in the Wild?
A semi-colon joins two related sentences that could stand alone.
"I went to the supermarket; Jane went to the drug store."
For instance.
Thanks. I wasn't sure about attributing the author and book, completely made up as they are.
