I *always* pick up things when I read aloud for my critique group, especially repeated words and missing ones. Reading aloud is so useful, but I don't have the patience to do it all in one shot.
Lorne: Snakes? Uh-huh. And they came out of your what? Okay. Okay, well, did they get up there themselves or is this part of a, you know, a thing? No, I'm not judging...Do we fight snakes? Angel: Only if they're giant. Or demons. Or giant demons. Are they giant demon snakes? Lorne: Well, unless this guy's 30 feet tall, I'm thinking they're of the garden variety.
'Lineage'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
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Amy - Mar 12, 2010 11:53:22 am PST #3157 of 6693
Because books.
erikaj - Mar 12, 2010 11:58:12 am PST #3158 of 6693
Always Anti-fascist!
I do that every day with the script...I used to feel more embarrassed about until Denis Leary said he did the same thing. FWIW. Gud, how far did you get with the script? Cause there's a new version now.
Gudanov - Mar 12, 2010 12:06:39 pm PST #3159 of 6693
Coding and Sleeping
I can get to the document from here, so I just sent what I have. It's not great feedback since I don't know the characters or show.
I especially liked the bit with ARI and MRS. ARI, I thought that was good and funny.
I can look at the new version if you want, but the same caveats: don't know the characters and it will be slow.
erikaj - Mar 12, 2010 2:34:51 pm PST #3160 of 6693
Always Anti-fascist!
They're funny, aren't they? I feel bad that that spousal bickering didn't fit in the new version.
Gudanov - Mar 15, 2010 5:49:06 am PDT #3161 of 6693
Coding and Sleeping
I got 58 knocked out, 59 is almost knocked out, and 60 is started. I've got a bad feeling about 60, there's some stuff I want to rush through at the beginning of 60 because I need to glue together the meat of 60 with the end of 59. I might be rushing a bit too much though. I'm tempted to let it be rushed with this revision and rethink it later.
Getting closer though, once I get through 60 (or maybe 60 and 61) I'll be pasting on the rough draft's conclusion with some non-trivial polishing and then this revision is done.
Gudanov - Mar 16, 2010 5:37:21 am PDT #3162 of 6693
Coding and Sleeping
Still pushing to get done. I'm well into 60 now, but there is still a fair amount to happen the chapter. Splitting seems likely.
Gudanov - Mar 17, 2010 5:30:49 am PDT #3163 of 6693
Coding and Sleeping
No progress last night. I had to work late and that wiped out my time. Hopefully I can make a bit of progress tonight. I've still got an outside chance of getting through to the end this weekend, but most likely I'll slip past that.
Gudanov - Mar 17, 2010 6:22:23 am PDT #3164 of 6693
Coding and Sleeping
Also, I got a bit of feedback on Book 1, always cool. Good stuff, I'll probably act on all the weak areas mentioned. It was exciting to read that a couple of things I was trying to achieve worked out for the reader.
Gudanov - Mar 18, 2010 5:36:40 am PDT #3165 of 6693
Coding and Sleeping
I got more of 60 written and it's already as big as most of my chapters even thought there is still a lot to cover. It'll probably be split. It looks like 62 won't be the last chapter after all.
Gudanov - Mar 18, 2010 7:51:04 am PDT #3166 of 6693
Coding and Sleeping
My wife found a big mistake in chapter 6, something totally implausible. I can't believe I didn't think of it, but then I changed things from the rough draft so I think the scene used to be plausible. I'm glad she caught it though. She loves to catch stuff like that.
Speaking of plausibility. I listened to an Atlanta airport scene in my Lee Child audio book. I don't know the Atlanta airport, but I totally didn't buy the scene regardless. The book is still a good listen, I just had to shrug off that scene.