Ailleann, I love that! Excellent drabble.
Can we maybe vote on the whole murdering people issue?
Wash ,'Serenity'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Amy - Oct 27, 2009 5:11:46 am PDT #2740 of 6690
Because books.
Gudanov - Oct 27, 2009 5:32:50 am PDT #2741 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
A got a little further in 23, but I don't like the last bit of dialogue I did so I'll have to kill it. I need to summarize over a short bit of travel, then I'll be back into the story as it is in the rough draft. I should be able to clip along at a better rate for awhile. Most of the words will be new, but I'll be following the rough draft again, not writing entirely new stuff.
Gudanov - Oct 27, 2009 6:07:52 am PDT #2742 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
I'm feeling in a low confidence phase again. Probably from a bit of struggling with the start of 23 along with two of the beta exchange people going inactive. Also, I ran over my desired word count for 22 and it's looking like 23 will run long too. I may have to depend on losing words in the next revision more than I was hoping.
If I get rolling in the rest of 23, 24, and 25, I'm sure I'll start feeling better about it.
Toddson - Oct 27, 2009 10:34:53 am PDT #2743 of 6690
Friends don't let friends read "Atlas Shrugged"
...Exactly how many teen zombie romance books are there?
And since some teenage girls in fiction seem to be brainless, how much appeal will they have for the zombies?
Atropa - Oct 27, 2009 1:17:51 pm PDT #2744 of 6690
The artist formerly associated with cupcakes.
Hey, may I please have a bit of quick hivemind editing/beta reading on a line for the next GCS column. One of my beta readers questioned something, saying that she thinks this particular line doesn't read as a sentence to her and seems kind of awkward. But it makes sense to me, and none of the other beta readers flagged it. This is the line:
Lightweight panne velvet or satin-finish fabrics scream costume, generally with an undertone of costume that came in a big plastic bag to that screaming.
Anne W. - Oct 27, 2009 1:19:50 pm PDT #2745 of 6690
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.
Jilli, it makes sense to me, but I think perhaps putting the first "costume" in single quotes might ensure clarity.
Polter-Cow - Oct 27, 2009 1:20:40 pm PDT #2746 of 6690
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!
I would remove "to that screaming" from the end, Jilli. It's unnecessary and, I think, what is causing your beta to find the sentence awkward.
Amy - Oct 27, 2009 1:26:02 pm PDT #2747 of 6690
Because books.
I would also take off the "to that screaming".
Atropa - Oct 27, 2009 1:27:25 pm PDT #2748 of 6690
The artist formerly associated with cupcakes.
Hmm, okay. I'll remove the "to that screaming". Thank you, gang!
Allyson - Oct 27, 2009 8:13:09 pm PDT #2749 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Last polish sent off to agent, and then she'll send off to publishers, likely tomorrow. I really need to change the home page on my website.
I figure with the holidays approaching, I won't hear back until February.
On to the next book...