No actual progress last night, but I did knock out my critique. I did some thinking though, I think I have a handle how things will work with the relationship complication caused by taking Edmund out.

I'm having trouble figuring out the end of Rainier's arc though. Tragic ending A, tragic ending B, or sad ending C.

I admire you so much for forging ahead like this. I can't wait to read the new version with the demosed Edmund.

Thanks. I'm getting to Edmund-less chapter 12. Heck, he isn't even in chapter 11.

When I finally get you 12 I'll have to send a couple of small notes of important changes that came along with the Edmund removing. Not very much to note, there's a snippet of offhand dialogue I added in 4 that's important later on and with Martin taking Edmund's place in 8 and the beginning of 9, then it's Martin, not Edmund, who decides to capture the thief rather than immediately help Aimee.

I've been thinking of it as the deEdmundization of Gud's ms.

I removed Edmund from 12 and 13 now. Two more chapters and I'll be caught up to the place where I left off to take care of the Edmund issue. The chapters won't require a lot of work to remove Edmund, but I always end up tweaking things a bit too.

So, is this thread useful for folks doing screenwriting?

For plot and character and pacing and all that, sure. I'm not sure how many of us in here are familiar with screenplay format (I know I'm not) but there are plenty of books for that. Also software.

I read a ton of scripts, proof for Tim sometimes. Whatcha got?

Wow, Allyson, someday when I'm better, I might have to show you my spec, too. I'd be embarrassed now...I don't know dick.