erika! Can't find your email anywhere. If you're still up for a beta, have your people email my people!

Cool...sending to your profile.

It looks like it jumps from chapter 7 to chapter 10, is that just a numbering error?

I was planning to listen to it on my commute, but my software recorded using Anna (default voice that ships with Windows) instead of Audrey and I can't listen to Anna for more that a few sentences. I'll start listening on my commute home. I'll delete the audio files the moment I'm done listening.

After listening to the whole thing, I'll start going through it in more detail, but I probably can't be as detailed as usual.

I didn't do any writing work last night, DW looked tired and stressed so I did back and head messaging and generally hanging out.

However I think I finally figured out my character arc for Rainier (aka Mr. Not-A-Character-In-The-Rough-Draft). I've decided to cut a section out of the plot and that blew up his arc, so I had to create a new one. Now I wonder if he is necessary at all, strictly speaking the plot would work without him ever coming up, but it would also lose a lot. The events would still transpire, he would still be there in the background, the reader just wouldn't see them.

I discovered three things I wrote and I had thought I destroyed all traces of still exist out on the Internet apparently rescued from a long defunct website. Terrifying and weird at the same time.

I'll have you all know that I will be a quivering, paranoid, impossible-to-live-with plate of gelatin until the first of the feedback comes in.

Someone may want to warn Kristen.

Heard back from lovely CP-- she caught a few nits, but otherwise says the new scene works well, so YAY for me and the first completely new scene I've written on this manuscript since MARCH.

You know, I hadn't really realized it had been that long since I wrote new material on this manuscript, but it had. I wrote the last new scene just prior to my surgery, then had to wait on agent response which took close to seven weeks, then did the new agent search, then set this aside in order to revise the Carmen manuscript and get it ready for submission.

I suppose it's not an accident that the first new words on this manuscript came literally the day after Carmen went out on wide submission?

::glares at subconscious for being a pissy git::

If for some bizarre reason you want to hear Audrey reading one of my chapters.

Chapter 14

There are several places I wince, but hey, it's almost a rough draft considering the amount that changed from the original version. If you listen to it, obviously there will be a few context problems since there are 13 chapters before.

I've enjoyed listening to Sam's adventure while commuting.

I have a question. I have a beta exchange person who writes well and certainly has more experience than I do. In 7800 words of two chapters (though divided into sections), there are 6 POVs. I feel a little red flag of too many POVs, is that a legit concern? She has an eye toward trying to sell this, so it isn't a purely subjective evaluation.

I wouldn't have a problem with it as long as it was clear whose eyes I was looking through. I love books that have multiple POVs but I hate it when I'm halfway through a page before I realize I've got the wrong character's voice in my head.