So there is something I can do, besides scream like a woman?

Wesley ,'Chosen'


The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Gudanov - Aug 12, 2009 7:12:09 am PDT #1992 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping

Last night, I went back and did some revision on chapter 1 after blogging that I decided to press head to chapter 9. I ended up make more changes than I though.

One thing though, I'm having trouble coming up with a physical beat that suggests annoyance or maybe disapproval (not disgust). I just have a frown right now for annoyance.


erikaj - Aug 12, 2009 7:19:57 am PDT #1993 of 6690
Always Anti-fascist!

Could he spit, click his teeth, slam his hand down on something? (how annoyed is he?)


Gudanov - Aug 12, 2009 7:30:54 am PDT #1994 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping

Slamming something is a good beat. There's nothing for him to slam, but doing something with excess force would probably work. He's fairly annoyed, it's a turf dispute between two different organizations on the same side.


Allyson - Aug 12, 2009 9:36:18 am PDT #1995 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica

I'm starting to feel much better about doing the book alone. Relieved, actually. It's a lot of work, but it's mine, and I like depending on me, even if it means if it fails to find a publisher, it's all me.


Gudanov - Aug 12, 2009 10:05:57 am PDT #1996 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping

I'm starting to feel much better about doing the book alone.

I think it will be a better book for it too.


Gudanov - Aug 13, 2009 5:30:15 am PDT #1997 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping

I revised chapter 1 again and I'm starting to really feel good about it. It feels tight.


Gudanov - Aug 13, 2009 5:54:54 am PDT #1998 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping

I also added this current revision to my 'Evolution of Chapter 1' blog page for those ones of people interested in seeing the process of going from rough draft to final revision (not there yet).

[link]

And yes, my mom left a comment.


Burrell - Aug 13, 2009 8:43:03 pm PDT #1999 of 6690
Why did Darth Vader cross the road? To get to the Dark Side!

I had a major a ha! today about my story and what was wrong with it. I think I may be able to fix it and finish it by Christmas.


Beverly - Aug 13, 2009 11:18:59 pm PDT #2000 of 6690
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.

Yay, Burrell!

And go you, Gud!


Barb - Aug 14, 2009 4:37:19 am PDT #2001 of 6690
“Not dead yet!”

Yay, Burrell and woo hoooooo Gud!

I'm still all preeny-like over the great email from Agent of Awesomeness.