See how I'm not punching him? I think I've grown.

Mal ,'Shindig'


The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Wolfram - May 04, 2008 3:00:52 pm PDT #110 of 6681
Visilurking

Thanks, Beverly. I really loved your death-as-freedom piece, both for its rich visual imagery and for its subtlety.

Connie, I can totally relate to that kind of freedom.


Connie Neil - May 04, 2008 3:23:16 pm PDT #111 of 6681
brillig

I listen to all the stories and such about credit card debt, and I yell at the TV "Not me!"


Typo Boy - May 05, 2008 9:02:06 am PDT #112 of 6681
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.

This is flash fiction rather than a drabble. I really think cutting this to 100 words would lose too much good stuff.
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Dead Alice

Nobody ever mysteriously disappeared from her restaurant that did not deserve to, she always insisted. Anyway, the police never proved a thing. Dead Alice lived, if that was the right word, in a cloud of rumors - most of them started by her. She was palely pretty; anyone could see that she was 22 at most. Anyone could have seen that for at least 40+ years - since THAT MAN wrote THAT SONG. (One of Dead Alice's supernatural gifts was the ability to speak in capital letters.)

She denied being the original Alice in the stories. "Dodson would not have known a fact if it had bit him". Her tone implied this was something she had tested personally.

No one ever saw Dead Alice eat or drink, at least no one who survived. To those rude enough and brave to enough to ask directly, she always replied: "I'm sure you would not wish to pry into intimate details."

Dead Alice slew monsters. "I won't tolerate anything in my territory that tries to be scarier than me."


SailAweigh - May 05, 2008 9:55:17 am PDT #113 of 6681
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb

Very nice, Typo! I love that last line.


Miracleman - May 05, 2008 11:02:55 am PDT #114 of 6681
No, I don't think I will - me, quoting Captain Steve Rogers, to all of 2020

Freedom

“You’re doing it again, aren’t you?”
“Doing what?”
“The way you’re walking, with new weight. The way your eyes look.”
He shrugs.
“The Process is one of the most painful ordeals you can subject yourself to. Mentally, emotionally, physically…”
“But the payoff. Strength, speed, mental clarity. I was a god, once upon a time, atop Olympus. I was there once, I can be there again.”
“You were a target!”
He doesn’t answer.
“Is it worth it?”
He doesn’t answer.
“What will it gain you? What can such sacrifice get you aside from power?”
He smiles.


SailAweigh - May 07, 2008 8:15:27 am PDT #115 of 6681
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb

Ticket to Ride

She sat at the table, head bent over the empty coffee cup. An envelope with a thick sheaf of bills inside rested under her hands. There had been more money in the cookie jar than she realized; she’d been afraid, no, ashamed, to count it. Months ago, her parents had tried to confine her. Little did she realize the freedom they were offering her until it was too late.

The waitress came by and refilled her cup. She picked it up, took a sip of the dark, bitter liquid and waited some more.

The bus station opened in an hour.


Wolfram - May 07, 2008 2:58:24 pm PDT #116 of 6681
Visilurking

I hope we're allowed more than one.

Riddance

Dropping the receiver, she could still hear his girlfriend's screams. She sat down, numb.

Her son's final words echoed like the gunshot that followed. "I'm tired of being your burden. Goodbye."

Despite herself, her first emotion was relief.


SailAweigh - May 07, 2008 3:05:36 pm PDT #117 of 6681
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb

As many as you want, Wolfram.


Typo Boy - May 07, 2008 4:14:10 pm PDT #118 of 6681
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.

Wow! that has major impact.


Wolfram - May 07, 2008 5:01:45 pm PDT #119 of 6681
Visilurking

Thanks, I'm trying to work on condensing as much as possible. Also I'm really bad at descriptive prose.