Tact is just not saying true stuff. I'll pass.

Cordelia ,'Dirty Girls'


Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies  

Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.


Lyra Jane - Feb 27, 2004 11:53:07 am PST #8668 of 10001
Up with the sun

Are people not reacting because they don't like *Charmed,* or because my writing sucks? Because if the latter, I would give cookies to anyone who gave me constructive criticism.

(Yes, I am needy. Extremely so. I'm also more proud of this story than of anything else I've written in quite a while, so if it sucks I'd like to know.)


erikaj - Feb 27, 2004 12:01:25 pm PST #8669 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

I didn't say anything cause I just read it right now...unfortunately don't know Connor or Charmed well, but it still kept my attention.


Lyra Jane - Feb 27, 2004 12:04:18 pm PST #8670 of 10001
Up with the sun

erika, you are a doll, especially since my reaction to your entire ouevre has been "This seems really funny and well-written, but I don't know Homicide so I won't comment." Thank you.

Apologies for the insecurity attack.


Deena - Feb 27, 2004 12:06:12 pm PST #8671 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara

Sorry, I read and then had to go deal with an Aidan evil.

I liked the story, except for the sex. I don't see slash as quickly as other people, I don't think, and two guys together who don't know one another, that light a connection... I dunno.. doesn't read as real. I'd either want at least one of them to have been shown to be curious about same-sex relationships previously, or turned on by the random weirdness of it, a little bit of a.. not quite abuser, but.. willing to take advantage. Maybe real is a little too much to ask.

The rest, I thought it was great. I liked the dialogue a lot -- really enjoyed Chris blurting out the fiancee. I don't watch Charmed, but I've seen one or two, enough to be able to place Chris, but that comment made him more three-dimensional.

This all may be my "who would want to shag HIM?" connor issues.


erikaj - Feb 27, 2004 12:12:41 pm PST #8672 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Damn, it really was the Best Show You're Not Watching. You could rent it, if you wanted.Writer's insecurity, I'm having it now, and it's NFG!I think I can only feel good about myself on alternate Thursdays.


Deena - Feb 27, 2004 12:15:21 pm PST #8673 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara

Erika, you're brilliant! stop that.

sheesh. Someone needs to put you in a room with Vamp!Munch... then you can tell us if he comes across as really real.

I have no clue what I'm saying, except that I know I'm right about the brilliant part.

gonna go back to the babies that ate my brain.


erikaj - Feb 27, 2004 12:24:51 pm PST #8674 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Me and Vamp!Munchkin...there's a happy room. We could, however, supply enough sarcasm for the Four Corners area. And then maybe he would eat me. Or drain my blood, whichever. It's a rule..the powers that be have decided that right after I decide to send something out, I must decide I suck.


sumi - Feb 27, 2004 12:26:42 pm PST #8675 of 10001
Art Crawl!!!

erikaj: are you sure those are TPTB? They sound a bit more like the SP.


erikaj - Feb 27, 2004 12:40:23 pm PST #8676 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Stupid People? Not even them...just Radio K-fucked, playing the greatest hits from my self-image demons.Why must they use a poor maiden so(although I doubt somebody who's paid as much attention to dick jokes as I have recently can claim much maiden-ness.)


Beverly - Feb 27, 2004 1:16:35 pm PST #8677 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.

LJ, I know Charmed better than I'd like other people to know I do, and I think you got both characters down pretty close to perfect. I'm with Deena a bit on the suddenness of the togetherness-getting, but otherwise your dialog and actions for Chris and Connor ring very true for me.