(rubbing hands together) Night Stalker!

These two sentences:

His priorities had shifted a bit with the passing decades. He'd once had a bladder a reporter could be proud of, never forcing him off the trail or away from a stakeout.

would read clearer in reversed order, perhaps, thus:

He headed into the depot himself, more interested at the moment in a real men's room than in pursuing his mysterious fellow travellers. He'd once had a bladder a reporter could be proud of, never forcing him off the trail or away from a stakeout. (But) His priorities had shifted a bit with the passing decades.

Once he had business taken care of, he found himself a seat in a corner of the bus depot's lobby...

And more V!Giles! yay!

also, this:

Four more went in the toaster, then syrup and butter were applied.

Needs a little rephrasing, I think. Or things could get messy.

Minor nitpicky things, all. Most importantly, Kolchak! And more V!Giles!

Nicely done, Plei. I think you broke me again.

Connie, these two lines read weirdly to me:

instead of entering the depot itself.

He headed into the depot himself,

I think if you deleted the word "itself" it would scan better.

I don't remember enough nightstalker to appreciate that as much as I ought, but I'm enjoying the V!Giles.

Connie, you should know I've been using your work as a standard for Vamping Beloved Characters. It's still hard cause when human Munch sucks the life out of somebody, he does it one little step at a time, like the rest of us.(Which reminds me of when the asked a Famous Woman Comic why she got divorced, and she said because she got tired of starting the day by saying "Stop it, you're killing me!" over and over again.) I had a point here, somewhere, I think I lost it.

I've got the whole printout of the Body Swap story put together in one place now as I start the rewrite. It's 298 pages, and takes up all of a huge 2.5 inch binder....

wow.

I think it weighs more than one of our cats.

Dang, and I thought 40 pages was a lot.

It took me June->November, it wasn't like I did it in a month or something.

Well, sure...I was gonna say I hadn't written anything that long, but it's a lie...my "Tales of the City" ripoff was about 200 pages when I abandoned it.

Connie, you should know I've been using your work as a standard for Vamping Beloved Characters.

Thank you, erika.

I'm trying to remember enough of NightStalker to get the voice right. And my process of "publishing" is: put it up here, check reactions, put it on my LJ, check reactions, until I have enough to put the chapter on my website. There'll be more V!Giles in a bit. t pause to remember what day it is, whether I have to work tomorrow, and how late I can afford to stay up tonight It's the time confusion of this job I hate most.