Victor, dude, I'm totally glad that worked. The scene, what she was seeing and thinking, was so powerful, it really needed to be there, just not as her thoughts at the moment.
I quite agree, although the deeper you dig into Karen's head, the more apparent it becomes that it's a weird, weird place. Still, I put that section away, and then looked at it again later, and it pretty much came down to taking away the quote marks and tweaking a bit. Sometimes the solutions are simple when you step away for awhile.
I'm loving the story, BTW.
Thank you. It's fun to write. I think I dig Karen too much, which is a shame, because I have to do mean things to her.
I think I dig Karen too much, which is a shame, because I have to do mean things to her.
I had to write a horrifying scene between the two protagonists in my series, for the third book. It turned my stomache.
You should hear Neil Gaiman on the subject. Hoo boy.
You should hear Neil Gaiman on the subject. Hoo boy.
Heh. I can imagine. You really do develop feelings for some of these fictional folks, and you really want it to work out for them but, well, it doesn't work that way. Sooner or later, the guy in the hockey mask's gotta do SOMEONE in, or else there's just no story.
Sooner or later, the guy in the hockey mask's gotta do SOMEONE in
Aint it the truth? Putting it rather crudely, all foreplay and no orgasm makes Reader a dull girl/boy.
Aint it the truth? Putting it rather crudely, all foreplay and no orgasm makes Reader a dull girl/boy.
Oh yeah. Besides, gleefully inflicting trauma? Fun.
No argument here, although I'd honestly rather read the trauma than have to inflict it on my own people.
No argument here, although I'd honestly rather read the trauma than have to inflict it on my own people.
Heh. I think, if I had a therapist, s/he and I would have many, many interesting conversations about the things I simultaneously love and hate doing to fictional people.
I think, if I had a therapist, s/he and I would have many, many interesting conversations about the things I simultaneously love and hate doing to fictional people.
"I will kill you, sir, in the most unpleasant and violent way imaginable." A fictional author, Paul somethingorother, telling Nero Wolfe that he was going to make him the murder victim in his next book
still owe you some notes on some other things of yours. which as it happens I hevn't forgot; I just need three spare hours to do it properly.
You've had a lot on your plate. And it's not like it's exactly been on fire for the last, oh, couple years. But when you get to it, yay! And I've lost count of what you have, if, when you do get to it, you could remind me?
Bev, you bet, but could you tell me the last chapters I've sent you notes on? I've read through 18, or thereabouts, and given general comments on the trends in characterisation and flow. There are a couple of things in the earlier chapters that I'm not sure I mentioned.
But I need to make notes. My brain is a sieve these days.
