oooooh.
Victor, it needs a paragraph break or three in there, I'd say.
Strong like an Amazon.
Tara ,'Storyteller'
Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies
Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.
deborah grabien - Jul 07, 2003 11:02:27 am PDT #4945 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Lee - Jul 07, 2003 11:04:04 am PDT #4946 of 10001
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.
Yay, high class lunch time reading! Very nice Victor.
Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 11:09:10 am PDT #4947 of 10001
this mess was yours / now your mess is mine
Spike was right behind him, leaping over the row of chairs like it were a subway turnstile.
Shouldn't that be "like it was"?
Rebecca Lizard - Jul 07, 2003 11:29:19 am PDT #4948 of 10001
You sip / say it's your crazy / straw say it's you're crazy / as you bicycle your soul / with beauty in your basket
The "were" is right, but the "like" should be "as though" or "as if" &c.
Subjunctive, man. Beautiful mood.
deborah grabien - Jul 07, 2003 11:30:06 am PDT #4949 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Yup, it's an "as if" rather than a "like."
And damn, does it rock.
Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 11:32:31 am PDT #4950 of 10001
this mess was yours / now your mess is mine
The subjunctive always gets the better of me. It's my Achilles heel.
victor infante - Jul 07, 2003 12:18:17 pm PDT #4951 of 10001
To understand what happened at the diner, we shall use Mr. Papaya! This is upsetting because he's the friendliest of fruits.
The "were" is right, but the "like" should be "as though" or "as if"
Yep. This is the right one. And it's fixed.
Spiralling down. Finally. Glad everyone's enjoying it, but man this is taking forever.
Elena - Jul 08, 2003 8:57:31 am PDT #4952 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
My slashfic assignment is soon ready for a second round of betas. Anyone interested in doing a quick and dirty beta? I'll send it out later tonight.
Lyra Jane - Jul 08, 2003 9:35:52 am PDT #4953 of 10001
Up with the sun
So my "Willow, the Vampire Slayer" drabble kept shouting at me and telling me it HAD to be a story, and I made the mistake of listening.
For four hours, while I was supposed to be working.
It's at 2,200 words now which I *think* is chapter one, and I have a sense of what will happen next -- I just need a break, and to assure myself I'm staying somewhat true to Willow's voice.
Is it okay if I post it?
P.M. Marc - Jul 08, 2003 9:37:09 am PDT #4954 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear
Post away!