Oooh, Deb! That's lovely! Shivery-lovely.
Although my mind catches at calling her a "girl" in the first sentence. Unless you did that deliberately, a wink and a nod to the reader.
Like any of that's enough to fight the Dark Master. Bator.
Xander ,'Lessons'
Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies
Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.
Steph L. - Mar 22, 2003 12:31:08 pm PST #2791 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
Fay - Mar 22, 2003 1:19:13 pm PST #2792 of 10001
"Fuck Western ideologically-motivated gender identification!" Sulu gasped, and came.
Oh, very nice, Deb. Lovely. Evocative.
Couple of typos:
amd combs her hair.
She has always wanted this villa, from the first time [insert "she"?} and Angelus came to Italy, in 1844.
where the man lays,
"the man lies", surely? Or is that a UK/US usage thing?
deborah grabien - Mar 22, 2003 3:09:45 pm PST #2793 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Lay/lie, UK/US. I was giving it the US take, for the majority - I'm always getting yelled it for using the Brit "lie", even though, well, it isn't "Love LAYS Bleeding". I've just modified it a bit, though, and I think it reads better this way.
The girl was a nod/wink, Steph, definitely.
Typos, about to be fixed.
I just felt like a nice bit of Darla erotica and anyway, I miss Italy, and with the current world sitch, I don't see getting back to Arezzo anytime soon, damnit.
amych - Mar 22, 2003 3:18:07 pm PST #2794 of 10001
Now let us crush something soft and watch it fountain blood. That is a girlish thing to want to do, yes?
I'm US. It's lie. Hmmph.
deborah grabien - Mar 22, 2003 3:19:20 pm PST #2795 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I'm US. It's lie. Hmmph.
Well, that's what I think, as well.
But three - count 'em, three - separate copy editors back in the late eighties/nineties screamed at my usage for the "American market."
Feh.
erikaj - Mar 22, 2003 4:28:56 pm PST #2796 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Sure, Deb, Americans are supposed to use one fork at dinner and have bad grammar. :) I liked the Darla, and it creeped me out too. Who better than Klinger to act out an mpreg.(I just don't get that whole thing, I gotta tell you.)
Rebecca Lizard - Mar 22, 2003 4:50:45 pm PST #2797 of 10001
You sip / say it's your crazy / straw say it's you're crazy / as you bicycle your soul / with beauty in your basket
I thought it was lovely, Deb.
(.... But use "lie", and I'll love it even more.)
deborah grabien - Mar 22, 2003 8:20:29 pm PST #2798 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I did make it "lie".
erika, those were AMERICAN editors, not UK editors. They screamed at me for it; I stetted "lie" they called me and howled. NOT UK copy editors being snobby; genuine US copy editors being insane. But their bosses wrote the cheques.
Yet another tiny reason I stopped writing for nine years....
I wanna see Klinger having an hysterical pregnancy, damnit.
amych - Mar 22, 2003 8:28:20 pm PST #2799 of 10001
Now let us crush something soft and watch it fountain blood. That is a girlish thing to want to do, yes?
Ugh, deb. I hope it's some consolation that around these parts you've got an audience that knows "lie" is the only right answer?
deborah grabien - Mar 22, 2003 8:31:21 pm PST #2800 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Yes, thank you. It's taken me years to get past some of the nonsense that was American publishing in that era.