Dana, that was lovely.

This is so perfect:

(you've been my secret)

And then this:

Kissing her hand first, mouthing the tips of her fingers and her knuckles until she's shaking.

Gah.

He'll kiss her at five in the morning, when she rolls over and accidentally elbows him in the stomach, and he finds he doesn't mind at all.

Very sweet.

You've really captured Luke! Very nice

Gah.

I second this wholeheartedly. Lovely, Dana.

I don't much like GG, but I do like that. I can't attest to veracity, obviously, but it's incredibly evocative.

And I want one.

Yay! Thanks, guys. I love it when a story sneak-attacks.

I keep thinking about how one might rewrite it as a long poem. With, like, three-line stanzas.

I am so obsessed.

What, my little thing?

You know what, if you want to play with it, you're welcome to.

It's like a Bitchfic remix.

Early query:

I'm halfway through the next to last bit of "Needfire". Should have it done by the weekend.

Any suckers, er, takers out there, to read it beginning to end when done, and beta for me?

Really? Neat. I'll do that.

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