Hell yes. Allyson, any and every suggestion I will ever make on anyone's work is prefaced by "maybe something like", to illustrate an idea, rather than a wording.
We die horribly and painfully, you go to hell and I spend eternity in the arms of baby Jesus.
Gunn ,'Not Fade Away'
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deborah grabien - Oct 11, 2004 9:40:32 am PDT #7217 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Steph L. - Oct 11, 2004 9:47:47 am PDT #7218 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
Connie, that's pretty much the same reaction I had to The Moldau, when I first heard it as a college freshman. It's still one of my favorite pieces of music.
Connie Neil - Oct 11, 2004 10:07:21 am PDT #7219 of 10001
brillig
And I'd never heard of Smetana till I hit college. There needs to be more Slavic music taught in schools. And Russians and all those other people.
Susan W. - Oct 11, 2004 10:34:26 am PDT #7220 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
t wonders if there's any way to make the drabbles I'd already half written in my head about portraits be about art education
t realizes she's probably missing the whole point of drabbles, but, dammit, those were nice little scenes
Steph L. - Oct 11, 2004 10:53:38 am PDT #7221 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
Susan, post them anyway. I say they fit.
t /decree
Susan W. - Oct 11, 2004 10:56:18 am PDT #7222 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Thank you, Mistress Teppy. Will do so sometime this evening, since I'm heading out soon for a mass of errands and appointments.
Allyson - Oct 11, 2004 10:56:24 am PDT #7223 of 10001
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Almost done with rewrite. Go team me.
And in your worm -> fish -> fishermen setup, the show doesn't figure into it at all, just the network.
I said, "A teevee show is just a shiny lure to get millions of people to watch commercials."
Show = hook.
Perhaps the metaphor itself is a little smarmy.
Polter-Cow - Oct 11, 2004 11:01:32 am PDT #7224 of 10001
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!
Show = hook.
Ah, see, in my mind, "lure" and "bait" are conflated. And my specific reference was to the later part of the paragraph where you do skip over the lure part.
Actually, if the audience is the worm...you put the worm on the hook. The word "lure" implies the audience is the fish, biting the hook.
Perhaps the metaphor itself is a little smarmy.
It's not smarmy, it's just not internally consistent to me.
victor infante - Oct 11, 2004 11:22:31 am PDT #7225 of 10001
To understand what happened at the diner, we shall use Mr. Papaya! This is upsetting because he's the friendliest of fruits.
Draft One of the new thang, "Orange County, 1906," is up here.
Allyson - Oct 11, 2004 12:40:49 pm PDT #7226 of 10001
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Okey dokey. I took out the fish metaphor. Anyone who is willing, please let me know if this is either more or less confusing.