Most people is pretty quiet right about now. Me, I see a stiff -- one I didn't have to kill myself -- I just get, the urge to, you know, do stuff. Like work out, run around, maybe get some trim if there's a willin' woman about... not that I get flush from corpses or anything. I ain't crazy.

Jayne ,'The Message'


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A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Polter-Cow - Jun 29, 2004 5:58:34 am PDT #5514 of 10001
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!

I hope GT has a decent rep, cause they have one of my stories right now and I hope they think it's FG.

Ploughshares apparently did a survey of some sort, and it's one of the top three literary magazines read among its readers. It looks like it's got a good rep. I hope they think your story is FG, and mine too, when I submit it. Are you doing any of the contests? I figure I might give them a try, especially the never-been-published one, since I hope not to be eligible for that one eventually.


erikaj - Jun 29, 2004 6:19:32 am PDT #5515 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

That's the one, babe. The story was betaed by Buffistas, including Nilly, so at least I can be sure I'm at my best to lose my literary virginity.


§ ita § - Jun 29, 2004 11:30:33 am PDT #5516 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

I tried very hard to get this into the past tense, where it belongs, but I can't. But now the first sentence is stuck in a different tense, and I don't have the heart to bring it current. Call it stylistic idiosyncrasy, if you will. Be kind.

Part of that same "action movie" as the turning point drabble exercise.

***********

It was different this time. Despite the officer's confusion over the phone, Carl is her friend, not her husband. And not dead.

Bruised and battered, though, she sees.

He hears the additional footsteps crunching across the hallway, and looks over slowly.

"Hey, Kit." He smiles. "Sorry about the window. And the bookshelf."

"You okay?" A bruise flowers across his cheek, and she worries.

"Yeah."

"Out of nowhere?"

"Isn't it always the way?"

She shakes her head at him, but keeps silent as the EMTs load him onto the ambulance cot.

It is different this time. But she's still a widow.


erikaj - Jun 29, 2004 11:37:38 am PDT #5517 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

December 2001

Her shock was so great that her glass, merlot and all,slipped gently from her hand. It looked like it was going to fly for a minute before landing with a huge crash. Her nervous system, always like a special-ed puppy in a crisis, kicked in belatedly. That’s right, Body, she thinks, way to get my back.
”Ugh, Jesus.” She mopped at the runoff on the table ineffectually.”I’m sorry. Tumor’s just one of those words. Nobody ever says ‘Thank God I got that tumor.”
Always with the dumb jokes and wiseass comments, she thinks. Shut up, dumbass.

“Well, I’d better get it. We don’t want the dogs to cut their pads.” Her mother moved to get a dustpan and pick up the broken glass.

“You should be resting...or something.” It felt like there was a little ugly creature in her mother’s body. Her own impairment felt more like being her own Siamese...conjoined twin.

(She laughs at herself later for being Crip Power enough to censor that thought at such a time. But all the enpowerment doesn’t stop her having it. Cheng-andEng’s mama has...breast cancer. Wonder if the telethon will be before or after the funeral.)


§ ita § - Jun 29, 2004 2:24:44 pm PDT #5518 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

Bargaining on them being distracted by the other four crashes, watching the lights move around the darkened building, she chooses the third window she'd broken.

Sneakers on plate glass make a neat, crunching, but hushed sound. For this quiet she is grateful, pausing at the door to scrape the soles free of the fragments. She can't afford the compromised traction.

Inventorying her weapons with her free hand, she reviews the building's plans in her head.

Should she rush straight to him, or hide until the guards settle down?

Two muffled thuds and a strangled scream from below end her questioning.


Steph L. - Jun 30, 2004 6:33:44 pm PDT #5519 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism

This is pretty first draft-y, so I may make changes. But since I hadn't drabbled in a while, here goes....

Shattered

He was a very fast learner -- that's what all his teachers said. They never had to explain anything more than once to him.

But that was school. This was home. When they said it would never happen again, he believed them. Every time. Again and again and again.

He believed Mommy and Daddy when they said they wouldn't fight anymore. No more yelling and throwing things. So he stopped wearing shoes in the house again, loving the feel of the thick carpet under his bare feet; after all, there'd be no silverware or unexpected trinkets lying where they shouldn't anymore. They promised.

Which is how he ended up in the emergency room, after dashing into the kitchen on a hot day, eager for popsicles. The shards of glass on the floor -- remnants of wine glasses -- caught the light, sparkling brilliantly, just before he ran full speed over them, crushing the shards and slicing deeply into the soles of his feet.


Beverly - Jun 30, 2004 7:41:21 pm PDT #5520 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.

That's pretty awesome in a not-done-it-forever drabble, there, Tep.


deborah grabien - Jun 30, 2004 7:59:02 pm PDT #5521 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

I'm thinking about trying one in which violence isn't the underlying theme. But broken glass is a metaphor for violence in so many ways....

Tep, that was damned cool. This category is making for some scary stuff.


deborah grabien - Jun 30, 2004 8:22:04 pm PDT #5522 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

In fact:

Weekend in Cap Ferrat

Warmth, salt coming in on the breeze off the Mediterranean. Ella Fitzgerald croons from the radio; they love her, here in France.

He circles your waist, the two of you swaying. Out toward Africa, the moon is gibbous, white, engorged. The villa he rented for this illicit weekend is mostly unfurnished. You don't mind, really; it means more room to dance.

He dips you to the music suddenly, his lips against your throat. The wineglass slips through your fingers, chattering to prismatic sharpness on the stone floor.

You ignore it, just keep dancing, grinding glass into powder under high heels.


Beverly - Jun 30, 2004 8:30:25 pm PDT #5523 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.

Oh, swoon.