Heh. I did wonder, there...(about pour-pore)

Oh, Kristin - that second version is so damned crisp, it's a killer. Clean, and without an excess word in there.

Beautiful.

Thanks Deb! I'm much happier with it now.

Catching up...

The last thing she remembered hearing was a crackle, a spitting, something that might have been firecrackers. They were distant, then not so distant, then closeby.

Deb, I love the opening of your drabble especially, the sense of motion.

Freshly made bed. Faintest rush of air from the ceiling vent.

Connie, this line brings me into the hospital room with you. I can smell that rush of air.

Silence is a gift to my mother, a relief from a busy day of noise and kids.

This line is great, erika. I love the idea of silence as a gift.

Okay, I think I have a narrative drabble on this topic waiting in me too.

Hmmm.

Kristin, shite. You are three for three. Sweet cuppin' cakes.

Beautiful, powerful drabbles, people. Wow.

Music Ending

There is always that moment, endless, heartbreaking, when the music is over.

Words, singing, laughter, anything that the human voice may produce - that stops, and that's fine. It leaves an echo, somehow, something that speaks in the inner ear, compact of reassurance that there will be amusement in future, and singing, shouting, voices yet to come.

In an empty theatre, when the last note of the piano hits the rafters and overhangs and settles back onto the keys like dust, the finality is the finality of absolute silence.

This is the silence of loss, and of my heart breaking.

This started as a memory of a night of stargazing in Colorado many years ago.

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As I switched off the ignition the sudden silence made me realize how loud the road noise had been -- the rumble of the engine, the whistle of the airflow, and the hissing of the tires.

Now I could hear the small sounds -- the pings from the cooling engine, the crunch of my shoes on the ground, the whisper of wind in the prairie grass.

As I sat and waited for nightfall, the small sounds gradually went away, leaving the personal sounds -- the creak of a knee, a shallow breath, a resting pulse.

Silence is not as quiet as you think.

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In the space between each breath lie eternities. Each covers vast reaches, into which she places her emotion - love, memories that she needs to keep strong, laughter and sharing and tenderness. She pours hatred at his unwilling betrayal, tears of loss, denial of the possibility of no future, and laces it all with panic.

Her lips are desperate against his, her fingers strong against his chest.

Another forever, filled with yesterday and shadows of tomorrow, makes her force back tears and inhale again.

She lowers her ear over his mouth.

More emptiness.

"Resuming compressions," she announces to an empty beach.

Staggering in from the panic and chaos of an unexpected move to offer this. I had four I was fiddling with last week and never finished any of them, damn it.

Challenge #11 [silence]

We expected things to be different when we moved to Wyoming. For two kids from the elbow by elbow crush of New Jersey, the Cowboy State was a separate country. Here was a blue dome of sky, acres of wind-sharpened grass, the pungency of sugar beets at harvest. The tangle of exhaust-choked highways was gone, as were the malls and the warrens of neighborhoods, the constant, frantic buzz of activity.

Here was silence, heavy and thick as a sound wall. That first night, we held hands beneath the sheet, stunned by the dark and listening to the void, alone together.