Welcome to the Hellmouth petting zoo.

Buffy ,'Beneath You'


The Great Write Way  

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


deborah grabien - Jun 01, 2004 1:17:36 pm PDT #4923 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Here's a porny one, for Teppy.

Feather

It's dyed a bright, incongruous turquoise; that much you saw, before he slipped the blindfold in place. The result of one sense being disabled is, of course, that all the others become more intense. That's part of this game. You knew that when you agreed to play.

So here you are, bound, blindfolded for the duration. There are all sorts of toys to hand, but something inside says he's reaching for the one you saw before seeing stopped.

Slow, taunting, he moves it between your breasts, your belly, the inside of your thighs: a long tapered feather, dyed turquoise blue.


Connie Neil - Jun 01, 2004 1:22:50 pm PDT #4924 of 10001
brillig

this one took a bit of doing

In the furnace of summer, the sky is sometimes pale yellow. No clouds, no breath of air, 110 degrees, and the shade is literally life-saving. As night comes on, the blue returns. Even at ten o'clock at night, you can still see the western horizon, the black of the mountains outlined against the deep, deep indigo of the sky.

In spring and fall, baby blue and clouds, with the hints of that empty color that comes with the heat.

In winter, it is grey. Weeks and weeks of grey. Except when the sun comes out and the wind turns killing and shoves the clouds out of the valley. When skin aches with the cold and every unshielded breath is an invitation to another round of painful spasms, the sky is perfection. The clearest, purest blue, the shade that people point to and say, "That. That is sky blue."


deborah grabien - Jun 01, 2004 1:24:25 pm PDT #4925 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Damn, Connie. Nicely done. It has a very taut feel to it, a respect for the length. Nice.


Connie Neil - Jun 01, 2004 1:28:40 pm PDT #4926 of 10001
brillig

Thanks! I can't really count words closely, as I'm sneaking this stuff out at work.

I'm dreading the oncoming heat and the alien color of the sky in summer.


deborah grabien - Jun 01, 2004 1:30:17 pm PDT #4927 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

I think it's over a hundred words - give me a second and I'll do a Word count - but it really has the feel of a drabble, a tautness to it. It works.

edit: 148 words. Thing is, it doesn't read particularly long.


Connie Neil - Jun 01, 2004 1:41:17 pm PDT #4928 of 10001
brillig

Yep, I'm longwinded. I always tend to the long forms rather than the short forms.


deborah grabien - Jun 01, 2004 1:43:43 pm PDT #4929 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Editing that down to 100 words probably wouldn't damage it, though - I think it's fine as it is, but there are places where short and sharp would probably make it even more effective.

Off to eat burritos and feed our feral cats. I'm personally amazed at how many blue-memories I have. Also amazed at my own tendency to write porn these days...


Katie M - Jun 01, 2004 1:56:31 pm PDT #4930 of 10001
I was charmed (albeit somewhat perplexed) by the fannish sensibility of many of the music choices -- it's like the director was trying to vid Canada. --loligo on the Olympic Opening Ceremonies

Yep, I'm longwinded. I always tend to the long forms rather than the short forms.

Heh. Drabbles are the only thing I've ever wanted more space for. I spent my entire academic career writing things that were a third of the required length and then feeling like I was padding them out.

Drabbles, though, I'm forever wanting another fifty words.


Dani - Jun 01, 2004 2:15:56 pm PDT #4931 of 10001
I believe vampires are the world's greatest golfers

When skin aches with the cold and every unshielded breath is an invitation to another round of painful spasms, the sky is perfection

Ah, Connie, that's it exactly. And the shadows on the snow are lavender-blue.

Deb, Joni Mitchell started running through my head the minute Steph posted this one. I love "a relationship not worth the vinyl of someone else's album."


deborah grabien - Jun 01, 2004 2:20:21 pm PDT #4932 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

I love "a relationship not worth the vinyl of someone else's album."

I keep forgetting how personal some of these drabbles are. Thing is, his band had an album come out at right around the same time (the man in the drabble, that is), but all I can remember is Blue, when I think about that particular kick in the gut.

He's also the gent in the feather drabble. Way more than I could handle, back in the day. But an education...