Susan, still need a beta? I just got home, and happy to oblige.
Wild monkey love or tender Sarah McLachlan love?
Xander ,'Him'
The Great Write Way
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
deborah grabien - May 30, 2004 8:44:05 pm PDT #4895 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Susan W. - May 30, 2004 9:06:43 pm PDT #4896 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Thanks, deb! Insent to your profile address.
deborah grabien - May 30, 2004 9:18:43 pm PDT #4897 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Susan, reading now. I have some comments - will be sending shortly. The hook is perfect, BTW.
Susan W. - May 30, 2004 9:29:56 pm PDT #4898 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Got it--thanks! I think your suggestions are right on target. Believe it or not, I'd already replaced one "devastated." It's amazing how taking frequent breaks to talk to a baby in a bassinet three feet from your computer prevents you from realizing you're repeating yourself!
deborah grabien - May 30, 2004 9:33:59 pm PDT #4899 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Oh, excellent. Thing is, since one of the things they're looking for is voice, you want to make sure you don't sound too cautious, too narrative. But there were really only those few places where it caught at me. The rest was just fine.
deborah grabien - May 31, 2004 7:48:51 pm PDT #4900 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Teppy, do we have a new theme?
Liese S. - May 31, 2004 8:02:59 pm PDT #4901 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
I'm glad you asked, deb. I was feeling all fidgety, but I figured, holiday weekend. I was trying not to be too pushy about it.
Steph L. - Jun 01, 2004 4:35:15 am PDT #4902 of 10001
this mess was yours / now your mess is mine
Oh, ooops! The holiday was feeling like a weekend, not a Monday.
A thousand apologies.
Challenge #7 is now closed.
Challenge #8 is: BLUE. The color, the emotion, the dog from Blue's Clues, Miles Davis -- anything goes. Get drabble-y.
Amy - Jun 01, 2004 9:02:02 am PDT #4903 of 10001
Because books.
Ooh, love the new drabble challenge.
Susan, you have e on the way. Loved the chapter, and am now frustrated because I don't know what happens to anyone!
deborah grabien - Jun 01, 2004 9:10:39 am PDT #4904 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
First drabble on the Blue theme. A memory, from 1980.
A Memory of Peder
"What are you staring at?"
She jumps a bit. She hadn't realised she'd been staring, but she can't help it. Those eyes - they're amazing. They're ridiculous.
"You stared, at my eyes." His voice is as addictive as the rest of him, the liquid power of that Danish accent as aphrodisiacal as any Spanish Fly has ever been. Jesus. Six-four, built like a porn star, that voice, and those mismatched eyes? Too much. Not fair.
She actually flushes, embarrassed. He tilts her chin up toward him, smiling.
"Which eye do you like better," he asks, "the brown or the blue?"