Deb, read it and loved it. Revisions are excellent. Ending is twistalicious.
Feedback would be minor if any, so I'm going to wait until tomorrow to do a more thoughtful reading for the nitpicky...
But as a whole, I'd say you nailed it.
Wash: Psychic, though? That sounds like something out of science fiction. Zoe: We live in a space ship, dear. Wash: So?
'Objects In Space'
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Pix - May 19, 2004 7:14:07 pm PDT #4769 of 10001
The status is NOT quo.
sj - May 19, 2004 10:43:23 pm PDT #4770 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
Deb, I will read it tommorrow. I am too wiped out tonight.
Nilly - May 20, 2004 12:45:49 am PDT #4771 of 10001
Swouncing
deb, if you're not too beta-ed for another one (too many cooks and the like), then I'd love to know how it continued, let alone ended (I've only read the very beginning).
deborah grabien - May 20, 2004 6:32:43 am PDT #4772 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Nilly, sent, of course. I got some great feedback - Kristin, P-C, Dana, everyone who read it had points to make, and every last point merited some serious consideration. I love beta readers....
victor infante - May 20, 2004 2:40:50 pm PDT #4773 of 10001
To understand what happened at the diner, we shall use Mr. Papaya! This is upsetting because he's the friendliest of fruits.
Deb, I owe you an apology. Haven't gotten to story yet--got sidetracked that night, and have been swamped since.
Will get to soon. WANT! READ! CLOWNS!
deborah grabien - May 20, 2004 3:07:41 pm PDT #4774 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Victor, I'd have thought you were still reeling from a certain Poetry Slam last night....
victor infante - May 20, 2004 3:11:51 pm PDT #4775 of 10001
To understand what happened at the diner, we shall use Mr. Papaya! This is upsetting because he's the friendliest of fruits.
Victor, I'd have thought you were still reeling from a certain Poetry Slam last night....
I laughed my ass off, and snapped my fingers Chicago-style.
But more than that, alas, is spoilery for this thread.
deborah grabien - May 20, 2004 3:13:53 pm PDT #4776 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Exactly. Hence my complete and utter lack of specificity.
Heh. Heheheheheh.
victor infante - May 20, 2004 3:16:37 pm PDT #4777 of 10001
To understand what happened at the diner, we shall use Mr. Papaya! This is upsetting because he's the friendliest of fruits.
Exactly. Hence my complete and utter lack of specificity.
Heh. Insent.
deborah grabien - May 20, 2004 3:20:26 pm PDT #4778 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Backflung, with snortage and much agreement.