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A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Connie Neil - May 10, 2004 10:00:21 am PDT #4541 of 10001
brillig

I want to do this drabble, but I have to wait for another subject to come out of my head. I do not want to dwell on what's in my head. (It's in regards to death, not anything that's happened to me, in case anyone was wondering.)


deborah grabien - May 10, 2004 10:10:11 am PDT #4542 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Third one, autobiographical, as are the first two. This one has nothing at all to do with music.

Damage

I'm sorry, the surgeon says.

I'm seventeen and my hands are destroyed. They're barely recognisable; the tendons are displaced, the bones bent, the skin puckered and burned.

Wow, says the surgeon, and carefully moves the light, examining the carnage. I've never seen damage quite like this.

I picked up the back end of a Cadillac - amazing stuff, adrenalin. We fell off a mountain, I thought my goddaughter was underneath. The metal was hot.

We may not be able to fix it, the surgeon says.

Sweating, I manage to bend all the fingers of my right hand except the middle.


Polter-Cow - May 10, 2004 10:15:12 am PDT #4543 of 10001
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!

Oh, that's funny. In a brilliant way. I like how, to me, it's in response to the surgeon's intellectual response to her emotional pain.


Beverly - May 10, 2004 10:22:26 am PDT #4544 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.

Geez, Deb. That's white-hot fuckyou, Dr. Kildare, isn't it?


deborah grabien - May 10, 2004 10:28:00 am PDT #4545 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Like I said, autobiographical. He was astonished by it - it took about 45 seconds to do it, too.

Man, I was a musician. Don't tell me you can't fix this shit.


Gris - May 10, 2004 10:41:10 am PDT #4546 of 10001
Hey. New board.

Man, I'm an angsty teenager if ever there was one. And I'm not even a teenager. Anyway, first submission:

I wonder what it would feel like to take her hand in mine. To take her hand, to feel her touch, to connect physically, intimately, for the first time.

And holding would lead to squeezing, and squeezing to caressing, and then, suddenly, the future...

I'll be playing with her fingers. One by one I'll count them and rub them, as I tickle her palms. Our hands, our bodies, our lives - connected. A kiss, a smile, and I'll lie down next to my love, my only love, and be happy.

If only...

If only I could take her hand.


Polter-Cow - May 10, 2004 10:47:09 am PDT #4547 of 10001
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!

That's ultrasappy, dude. But it's sweet.

Our hands, our bodies, our lives - connected.

This is a nice bit, and I think one that could be expanded. As it stands, it's still a bit over the top, but I like the concept.


Gris - May 10, 2004 10:55:47 am PDT #4548 of 10001
Hey. New board.

Of course it's sappy. I'm a sappy guy.

Also, I kinda meant it to be over the top.

Don't you ever get super-sappy-gross when you first have a real crush on somebody? Most of the poem is meant to be imagination, the overactive, impossible imagination of somebody (me) when in the earliest, flirtatious, not-even-a-relationship stages of a relationship. A silly dream of the perfection that might be, but probably won't.


Polter-Cow - May 10, 2004 10:58:28 am PDT #4549 of 10001
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!

Also, I kinda meant it to be over the top.

Oh, good. Then you succeeded!


sj - May 10, 2004 10:58:48 am PDT #4550 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."

Wonderful drabbles, everyone. I have a couple of ideas, but I need to think about it a bit more.