I am so fascinated by that linguistical clarification!
Also, Nilly, I think you get super bonus points for writing (in a non-soferet way) so beautifully in more than one language.
Angel: Just admit it: you think you're gonna ride in, save the day, and sweep Buffy off her--Spike: Like you're not thinking the same thing. Angel: I'm already seeing somebody. Spike: What, dog girl?
'The Girl in Question'
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Pix - Apr 29, 2004 8:32:21 am PDT #4313 of 10001
The status is NOT quo.
erikaj - Apr 29, 2004 9:03:14 am PDT #4314 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Yes, Nilly is a linguistic goddess.
deborah grabien - Apr 29, 2004 9:08:33 am PDT #4315 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Nilly - with all due respect to my cherished beta readers - is the single most instinctive beta reader I've ever encountered. And possibly because English is not Nilly's first language, she catches little things in continuity that neither I, nor most EFL speakers and readers, will catch.
Above rubies, yo.
erikaj - Apr 29, 2004 9:16:19 am PDT #4316 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
wrod. "And I guess I'll just wallow in self-pity now."(/Pissy!Munchkin) :)
sj - Apr 29, 2004 11:21:30 am PDT #4317 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
sj, yours is very powerful. I do wonder if your using the phrase, "awkward teenager" twice was deliberate, for emphasis and comparison?
Not deliberate. I should look at it again. It was such a terribly difficult piece to write that even though I edited a few times, I may have missed some major flaws because I was afraid I would stop myself from posting it.
erikaj - Apr 29, 2004 11:27:48 am PDT #4318 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
BTDT. I still do that.
sj - Apr 29, 2004 11:32:19 am PDT #4319 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
BTDT. I still do that.
Thinking about it now, and the first time awkward teenager appeared there was originally the phrase "young girl", and then the memory of that doctors visit came up and it had to be teenager and I changed the "young girl" to fit not realizing I used the same phrase twice. Although it is very much the right phrase for the memory.
Also, I wanted to mention that I tried very hard to write this drabble from the first person point of view, and I just couldn't. I guess I needed some distance from the events to be able to write it, but I might go back and change the pronouns later.
deborah grabien - Apr 29, 2004 12:21:24 pm PDT #4320 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Huh. I thought the repetition was deliberate: as in, awkward teenager, think again, awkward teenager. I thought it was there to smack home the "fishnet tights" line.
Beverly - Apr 29, 2004 12:28:43 pm PDT #4321 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
I thought it might be, that's why I asked.
I also just noticed, actually, that I used all five senses in mine. It wasn't intentional, it just happened. But it's sorta neat. Left hand, right hand.
deborah grabien - Apr 29, 2004 1:11:34 pm PDT #4322 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Bev, that's a fascinagting point. I wonder how many of the drabbles did use all five senses?