Oh, lovely, Teppy! The "built for reading" really hits home, too. But darnit, I wish you hadn't had to cut for length, I wanted it to be longer, wanted just a bit more. That's a good thing, right?
Harmony: Somebody remembered to pick me up the sweetest unicorn. Guess someone was feeling guilty for standing me up in tenth grade. Brad: What? Had to get her something. She sired me. Peaches: Sire-whipped.
'Beneath You'
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Beverly - Mar 28, 2004 6:57:43 am PST #3816 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Pix - Mar 28, 2004 6:58:20 am PST #3817 of 10001
The status is NOT quo.
Cool, Teppy! Thank you for sharing! I love the lines, "Essentially, I'm built for reading, with occasional breaks for snacks and naps. Certainly not built for a sport that was the precursor to ballet, that most graceful of physical exertions." It conveys your meaning elegantly and yet humorously.
ETA: semi-x-post!
Nilly - Mar 28, 2004 7:14:44 am PST #3818 of 10001
Swouncing
Teppy, it's lovely!
I love the first paragraph - the physical difficulties described line after line, ending it with "I'm in seventh heaven". I love that you go along with this structure of expect-one-thing-and-get-another for a few more paragraphs. Like pretty much everybody, I liked the "built for reading" line, and I also liked "it was a challenge that used both my flabby muscles and my limber brain". Most of all, I liked the feeling of 'something in the move', if I'm making any sense, that I got from reading - like you're eager for the next step.
Thank you for re-posting that.
amych - Mar 28, 2004 7:59:09 am PST #3819 of 10001
Now let us crush something soft and watch it fountain blood. That is a girlish thing to want to do, yes?
Lovely, Teppy!
Anne W. - Mar 28, 2004 8:52:20 am PST #3820 of 10001
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.
Brava!
erikaj - Mar 29, 2004 3:33:39 pm PST #3821 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
I got excellent, effusive feedback on the tattoo piece. It is still not a publication, yet. And even so, no $.But the editor of Mouth wants to work with me again...I'm gonna call her tomorrow...she's in KS, and wants to talk with me over the phone...which feels like "How quaint!" already cause mostly I do that stuff by e-mail. Can't tell you the last time I had a phone call of any extended length... I did understand about Jane Austen Midlist complaining about "Could somebody just say 'yes" already?!" Because I sort of feel that way now, even though I know there are things that aren't right about the piece. Like that stupid tense thing which is my single biggest writing problem, and has been since whenever people learn verbs have tenses. And she took the time, which is extremely cool. But part of me wishes she could've just said "Great. Cool. We'll run it in September." Especially since no money is changing hands(Is that crass? Cause it feels crass) And this is an award-winning magazine...I wouldn't want them not to edit me.But I'd rather hear yes than "No, but..."
deborah grabien - Mar 29, 2004 3:40:37 pm PST #3822 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
ERIKA!
Oh man, good stuff.
Astarte - Mar 29, 2004 3:47:52 pm PST #3823 of 10001
Not having has never been the thing I've regretted most in my life. Not trying is.
Erika, that's EXCELLENT!!!
sj - Mar 29, 2004 3:54:24 pm PST #3824 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
Great news, erika!
Susan W. - Mar 29, 2004 3:56:28 pm PST #3825 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Wonderful, erika!