Verra Nice, Miss Tep.
Willow: That's a work ethic! Buffy, you're developing a work ethic! Buffy: Do they make an ointment for that?
'Beneath You'
The Great Write Way
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Astarte - Mar 26, 2004 8:08:06 am PST #3773 of 10001
Not having has never been the thing I've regretted most in my life. Not trying is.
Susan W. - Mar 26, 2004 8:08:17 am PST #3774 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Wonderful, Teppy!
Steph L. - Mar 26, 2004 8:09:13 am PST #3775 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
I'm not quoting because of the pre-publication thing, but the line abotu being built for reading? Cracked me up.
I think probably quoting a line would be okay, but I'm not sure. Anyway, thanks! My small group in my writing class loved that line, too. When they heard I had to edit it down from 800 to 500 words, they threatened me with grave injury if I cut that line.
sj - Mar 26, 2004 8:11:42 am PST #3776 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
Steph, that is a damn good article. Congratulations on getting it published.
erikaj - Mar 26, 2004 8:11:46 am PST #3777 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Good one, Tep.
Lyra Jane - Mar 26, 2004 8:12:02 am PST #3778 of 10001
Up with the sun
they threatened me with grave injury if I cut that line.
As would I have. Lines like that make the difference between a nice little "I started a new sport and boy am I sore!" piece, and an essay that gives you a look at someone you didn't know, and you wrote the latter.
deborah grabien - Mar 26, 2004 8:12:34 am PST #3779 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Oh, excellent piece! Beautifully balanced, too, which isn't always possible in short pieces.
sumi - Mar 26, 2004 8:16:11 am PST #3780 of 10001
Art Crawl!!!
Teppy -- that was beautiful!
Calli - Mar 26, 2004 8:20:11 am PST #3781 of 10001
I must obey the inscrutable exhortations of my soul—Calvin and Hobbs
Loved the piece, Teppy. I especially like how you worked in bits of info like
a sport that was the precursor to ballet,
and
fencing is a competition that requires the participants to think ahead, to try to anticipate their opponent's next move.
Amy - Mar 26, 2004 9:00:07 am PST #3782 of 10001
Because books.
My favorite is the line near the end about the swords, but I also liked the reference to chess and the "limber brain" bit. And I don't think the end is too cheesy at all. Congratulations! On both the article and the fencing, as a matter of fact.
Deb, I'd love to read it, all of it. And if you want me to wait to comment about pacing, no problem.
Never read Perfect Storm or Into Thin Air, but my husband did, and I think he liked Into Thin Air better, as well.