Wonderful, Teppy!
If every vampire who said he was at the crucifixion was actually there, it would have been like Woodstock.
Spike ,'Same Time, Same Place'
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Susan W. - Mar 26, 2004 8:08:17 am PST #3774 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Steph L. - Mar 26, 2004 8:09:13 am PST #3775 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
I'm not quoting because of the pre-publication thing, but the line abotu being built for reading? Cracked me up.
I think probably quoting a line would be okay, but I'm not sure. Anyway, thanks! My small group in my writing class loved that line, too. When they heard I had to edit it down from 800 to 500 words, they threatened me with grave injury if I cut that line.
sj - Mar 26, 2004 8:11:42 am PST #3776 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
Steph, that is a damn good article. Congratulations on getting it published.
erikaj - Mar 26, 2004 8:11:46 am PST #3777 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Good one, Tep.
Lyra Jane - Mar 26, 2004 8:12:02 am PST #3778 of 10001
Up with the sun
they threatened me with grave injury if I cut that line.
As would I have. Lines like that make the difference between a nice little "I started a new sport and boy am I sore!" piece, and an essay that gives you a look at someone you didn't know, and you wrote the latter.
deborah grabien - Mar 26, 2004 8:12:34 am PST #3779 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Oh, excellent piece! Beautifully balanced, too, which isn't always possible in short pieces.
sumi - Mar 26, 2004 8:16:11 am PST #3780 of 10001
Art Crawl!!!
Teppy -- that was beautiful!
Calli - Mar 26, 2004 8:20:11 am PST #3781 of 10001
I must obey the inscrutable exhortations of my soul—Calvin and Hobbs
Loved the piece, Teppy. I especially like how you worked in bits of info like
a sport that was the precursor to ballet,
and
fencing is a competition that requires the participants to think ahead, to try to anticipate their opponent's next move.
Amy - Mar 26, 2004 9:00:07 am PST #3782 of 10001
Because books.
My favorite is the line near the end about the swords, but I also liked the reference to chess and the "limber brain" bit. And I don't think the end is too cheesy at all. Congratulations! On both the article and the fencing, as a matter of fact.
Deb, I'd love to read it, all of it. And if you want me to wait to comment about pacing, no problem.
Never read Perfect Storm or Into Thin Air, but my husband did, and I think he liked Into Thin Air better, as well.
deborah grabien - Mar 26, 2004 9:10:26 am PST #3783 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
AmyLiz, the thing about Krakauer's book is that he was, as the phrase goes, on his knees to the event. It begins early on, before the disaster, when he's flying over the Himalayas and looks down and they're just under him. And he suddenly realises, he's about to try and walk up to the cruising altitude of a 737. He lays no blame, although it's obvious he feels the professionals, like Anatoli Boukreev, should have known better and done more.
It's really an uncanny book. And following Into Thin Air by reading Anatoli Boukreev's The Climb, another look at the same events, it staggering. Also heartbreaking; Boukreev died in an avanlance on Annapurna in 1997.
Why yes, I am a high altitude climbing freak. Weird, I know.
AmyLiz, I'll send it along, as soon as I can get back on the office computer; all my stuff is on that hard drive, and even with the d-link I can't attach it.