Ooh! Much better! It makes her hurrying away stand out so much more.
Patron: That girl is a witch. Mal: Yeah, but she's our witch.
'Safe'
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A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Anne W. - Nov 14, 2003 7:49:08 am PST #2716 of 10001
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.
deborah grabien - Nov 14, 2003 7:49:16 am PST #2717 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Yes. That falls far more effectively, methinks.
Anne W. - Nov 14, 2003 7:50:19 am PST #2718 of 10001
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.
BTW, Deb, I hope to have some comments to you sometime this weekend.
Strix - Nov 14, 2003 8:02:13 am PST #2719 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
b.org ate my post:
Deb, I'm so excited for your book! I looked at Amazon yesterday to see if any more reviews were up; I can't wait to see what people say!
Whoooo you!
deborah grabien - Nov 14, 2003 8:07:10 am PST #2720 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Weet! Go, best seller! Choose, best seller!
Manoman. Plus I want to finish Matty Groves and get the sucker out in full final form to beta readers everywhere.
Strix - Nov 14, 2003 8:25:32 am PST #2721 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
OK, since no one ran away screaming at the first one....
__________________________
Too many time you wander,
searching the night for the right --
the right boy, the right plan, the right excuse.
And sometimes you find all three.
Lucky you.
But I hear you searching in the night,
sounding your cry, shrill and plaintive,
over the clamor of the crowd,
and I am appalled by your naivte and boldness.
But I don't want to shelter you.
I want to watch you seek, and crash and burn, and rise.
Because then I don't have to.
deborah grabien - Nov 14, 2003 8:30:09 am PST #2722 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
OK, there's something - damn. I can't analyse; I refuse.
But I can try this, Erin, and please tell me sod off and shut the fuck up if not?
But I don't want to shelter you.
I want to watch you seek, and crash and burn
and rise.
Because that way?
I don't have to.
(There's just something - something in the pauses, or the breaths.)
Strix - Nov 14, 2003 8:36:38 am PST #2723 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
No, no. No sodding off, here.
I pondered (god, how pretentious!) the crash and burn line, too.
I do like the irony in dropping, the "rise" line - that's good.
Hrm.
Betsy HP - Nov 14, 2003 9:18:12 am PST #2724 of 10001
If I only had a brain...
Deena - Nov 14, 2003 9:22:43 am PST #2725 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Deb, I did a review, but it wouldn't let me say what should be purchased with it. Right now it recommends Sunshine, which isn't really a bad choice, though not thematic or even similar in style. I did like them both. Fewer narrative problems in Weaver, though.