OK. About to send big chunk to deb and Deena, then to break it up and send in several pieces to sj.
Mal: Yeah, well, just be careful. We cheated Badger out of good money to buy that frippery, and you're supposed to make me look respectable. Kaylee: Yes, sir, Captain Tightpants.
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Susan W. - Oct 06, 2003 9:53:03 pm PDT #2103 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
deborah grabien - Oct 06, 2003 10:11:42 pm PDT #2104 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Susan, got it. Downloading to my hardrive, and will get to it soonest.
Susan W. - Oct 06, 2003 10:13:36 pm PDT #2105 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Insent to sj as well, and I'm off to sleep.
Susan W. - Oct 07, 2003 9:24:10 pm PDT #2106 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
t whimper
Why did I just let DH read over my revised opening? It's not like this is actually his kind of book, but his verdict, "It's fine, but your heroine sounds awful immature," has me doubting pretty much everything.
sj - Oct 07, 2003 9:32:29 pm PDT #2107 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
Why did I just let DH read over my revised opening? It's not like this is actually his kind of book, but his verdict, "It's fine, but your heroine sounds awful immature," has me doubting pretty much everything.
Ignore your DH. I have not found your heroine to be immature at all.
deborah grabien - Oct 07, 2003 9:33:32 pm PDT #2108 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Susan, take the ms away from Dylan and smile and pat his hand and then stop it.
For one thing, she is immature, in the sense that she's cloistered and young. From what I'm reading? She's fine.
edit: fine as in, right reactions for her conditions and age.
Susan W. - Oct 07, 2003 9:36:03 pm PDT #2109 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Whew. Though I'm wondering if I made a mistake by moving the bit where she acts all giddy over her cousin's homecoming to the first page, because that is her immature point, her schoolgirl crush on him--it's supposed to be. She'd be entirely too much of a freak if she were eighteen years old and only mature and responsible, and she needs a blind spot to overcome. But maybe I shouldn't lead with that if I want people to take her seriously as a romance heroine. Argh! Editing harder than writing book in the first place!
sj - Oct 07, 2003 9:38:48 pm PDT #2110 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
She'd be entirely too much of a freak if she were eighteen years old and only mature and responsible, and she needs a blind spot to overcome.
Especially considering the time the story takes place and her upbringing. Do you no longer open the story in the library?
Susan W. - Oct 07, 2003 9:43:34 pm PDT #2111 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
It still opens in the library, but now it starts right at the moment Julius enters and Lucy gets all giddy over him.
Nilly - Oct 07, 2003 11:39:33 pm PDT #2112 of 10001
Swouncing
It's fine, but your heroine sounds awful immature
Susan, even though I obviously have no idea what I'm talking about, since I haven't read the novel (I'd like to add 'yet' to that sentence, please), from what you posted here it seemed to me like Lucy not being mature at the beginning of the story was part of the point - that she grew up throughout it, that, again, this is a sentence that has a 'yet' in it.
In any way, when I read, I much prefer a character who is less 'oh, so mature, even though she's so young' and more in a reasonable place for her age when it comes to this question, if I'm making myself remotely clear.
Argh! Editing harder than writing book in the first place!
You finished a novel. You can do this.