On second thought, I'll send y'all the pre-edited version, since figuring out how to rejigger the backstory is going to be the work of more than fifteen minutes. Just know that I plan to shift the badly frontloaded backstory from the first seven pages to somewhere later in the first chapter or two, and open with Julius walking into the library and startling Lucy. (Unless, of course, you all tell me, "No! Backstory good! Keep the backstory where it is!")
Tact is just not saying true stuff. I'll pass.
Cordelia ,'Dirty Girls'
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Susan W. - Oct 06, 2003 9:31:21 pm PDT #2099 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
sj - Oct 06, 2003 9:31:39 pm PDT #2100 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
Several chunks would be easier for my computer.
deborah grabien - Oct 06, 2003 9:39:14 pm PDT #2101 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Single word doc works for me, Susan. I can download it.
Deena - Oct 06, 2003 9:45:17 pm PDT #2102 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
I'm fairly certain my ISP can handle the whole thing, but if it doesn't show up soon, I'll let you know.
Susan W. - Oct 06, 2003 9:53:03 pm PDT #2103 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
OK. About to send big chunk to deb and Deena, then to break it up and send in several pieces to sj.
deborah grabien - Oct 06, 2003 10:11:42 pm PDT #2104 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Susan, got it. Downloading to my hardrive, and will get to it soonest.
Susan W. - Oct 06, 2003 10:13:36 pm PDT #2105 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Insent to sj as well, and I'm off to sleep.
Susan W. - Oct 07, 2003 9:24:10 pm PDT #2106 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
t whimper
Why did I just let DH read over my revised opening? It's not like this is actually his kind of book, but his verdict, "It's fine, but your heroine sounds awful immature," has me doubting pretty much everything.
sj - Oct 07, 2003 9:32:29 pm PDT #2107 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
Why did I just let DH read over my revised opening? It's not like this is actually his kind of book, but his verdict, "It's fine, but your heroine sounds awful immature," has me doubting pretty much everything.
Ignore your DH. I have not found your heroine to be immature at all.
deborah grabien - Oct 07, 2003 9:33:32 pm PDT #2108 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Susan, take the ms away from Dylan and smile and pat his hand and then stop it.
For one thing, she is immature, in the sense that she's cloistered and young. From what I'm reading? She's fine.
edit: fine as in, right reactions for her conditions and age.