Steph, that's enchanting!
Man, you just get darker and darker, and the weird thing is, your aura? Beige.
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deborah grabien - Jul 07, 2003 6:12:08 pm PDT #1527 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 6:17:00 pm PDT #1528 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
The other one I rather like is...well, I'm just going to post it without explanation. And I don't mean to be coy, but it has to stand as is, w/o author info.
Coda
Beyond the words, past the syllables' edges (listen; this
Is for you, you said), murmurs blossom deep inside. Lighting
This fire, warming this ice-white flesh, making it
Tingle as it slowly comes to life: whispers, urgent and low,
Evoke pianissimo, largo, allegro, forte!
Rest.
Since these are memories (ghosts) of something
Which never happened, there is no
Explanation for notes still hanging in the air. No
Excuse makes sense of the repeated sharp
Twinge: phantom limb pain that lingers.
deborah grabien - Jul 07, 2003 6:18:48 pm PDT #1529 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Damn. I think you just broke me.
Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 6:20:28 pm PDT #1530 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
It broke me, too. But it says everything I wanted to say, and I'm not sure any other piece of writing I've done has actually been able to do that.
And thank you! That's high praise.
deborah grabien - Jul 07, 2003 6:36:29 pm PDT #1531 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I posted the last piece of poetry I wrote (October 1994) in my livejournal a few weeks back. It took this long before I could deal with the death it deals with.
Deena - Jul 07, 2003 6:40:14 pm PDT #1532 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Oh, Steph, I do like that poem. That's just lovely.
Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 6:43:30 pm PDT #1533 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
Thank you! I'm not sure I'd go so far as to say it's my best piece of writing, but it's my favorite.
Deena - Jul 07, 2003 6:48:50 pm PDT #1534 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
I'm a poetry philistine. I love some of it. I wish I could write it. (I'm like that, "I don't know art, but I know what I like" guy) But a lot of it that other, better authors and/or critics love, I don't get. This makes me feel stupid. For a poem to move me it has to move me (huh, not sure I like the way I phrased that but, carrying on) usually with a story of some sort. That one moved me.
Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 7:01:55 pm PDT #1535 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
t now rifling through my (meagre) pile of poetry...
This one amuses me. I wrote it last Fall (obviously), when I was playing with structure:
Daylight Savings Time
I shake my tiny fist ineffectually
at the 5:00 darkness.
An hour stolen with the
turn of a dial.
Shadows creep into corners
that only a week ago
held puddles of sunshine.
Gloom is the backdrop
as day is kidnapped by night.
The days grow shorter.
deborah grabien - Jul 07, 2003 7:08:23 pm PDT #1536 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I tend to avoid the whole structure issue (when I'm writing it, not reading it) unless I'm sitting down to write a villanelle or a sestina or a particular structure. Otherwise, I just let it rip.
But I very much liked that one, Steph, because I love the sense of individual vignettes all leading down the same road.