It broke me, too. But it says everything I wanted to say, and I'm not sure any other piece of writing I've done has actually been able to do that.
And thank you! That's high praise.
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Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 6:20:28 pm PDT #1530 of 10001
this mess was yours / now your mess is mine
deborah grabien - Jul 07, 2003 6:36:29 pm PDT #1531 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I posted the last piece of poetry I wrote (October 1994) in my livejournal a few weeks back. It took this long before I could deal with the death it deals with.
Deena - Jul 07, 2003 6:40:14 pm PDT #1532 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Oh, Steph, I do like that poem. That's just lovely.
Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 6:43:30 pm PDT #1533 of 10001
this mess was yours / now your mess is mine
Thank you! I'm not sure I'd go so far as to say it's my best piece of writing, but it's my favorite.
Deena - Jul 07, 2003 6:48:50 pm PDT #1534 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
I'm a poetry philistine. I love some of it. I wish I could write it. (I'm like that, "I don't know art, but I know what I like" guy) But a lot of it that other, better authors and/or critics love, I don't get. This makes me feel stupid. For a poem to move me it has to move me (huh, not sure I like the way I phrased that but, carrying on) usually with a story of some sort. That one moved me.
Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 7:01:55 pm PDT #1535 of 10001
this mess was yours / now your mess is mine
t now rifling through my (meagre) pile of poetry...
This one amuses me. I wrote it last Fall (obviously), when I was playing with structure:
Daylight Savings Time
I shake my tiny fist ineffectually
at the 5:00 darkness.
An hour stolen with the
turn of a dial.
Shadows creep into corners
that only a week ago
held puddles of sunshine.
Gloom is the backdrop
as day is kidnapped by night.
The days grow shorter.
deborah grabien - Jul 07, 2003 7:08:23 pm PDT #1536 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I tend to avoid the whole structure issue (when I'm writing it, not reading it) unless I'm sitting down to write a villanelle or a sestina or a particular structure. Otherwise, I just let it rip.
But I very much liked that one, Steph, because I love the sense of individual vignettes all leading down the same road.
Steph L. - Jul 07, 2003 7:12:14 pm PDT #1537 of 10001
this mess was yours / now your mess is mine
Well, I've had my fights with vilanelles and pantoums. But the idea of losing time and then losing a line per stanza was too good to pass up.
I may be the next great voice in light verse. Just you wait.
deborah grabien - Jul 07, 2003 7:20:53 pm PDT #1538 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I may be the next great voice in light verse. Just you wait.
Hee! I believe it.
And besides, you could offer it as a course should you happen to open a writing school.
Somewhere other than where you are, that is.
I'm just saying....
Deena - Jul 08, 2003 2:40:28 am PDT #1539 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
I didn't even get the losing a line... Yes, it's proven, I'm a poetry moron.