I'm thinking of calling this Exaltation Remembered
I think it's too long to post here (11,848 words), but comments, either here or in e-mail, are hereby requested of those who have the time and the want.
Zoe: She shot you. Mal: Well, yeah, she did a bit... still --
'Serenity'
The Great Write Way
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Deena - Apr 27, 2003 7:13:44 am PDT #1186 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Beverly - Apr 27, 2003 9:05:24 am PDT #1187 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Deena, it's marvelous! I'm awed, truly. It's very sensual, not just visual but every sense. There's a ruined innocence, a joyous sensuality tainted with the ebbing knowledge of wonders lost, which makes your title very appropriate.
I'm also pissed, because my stupid computer cuts off everything after
"Lili?
"Yes, Eve?"
"Do you still love me?"
and I can't figure out how to read the rest. Help?
Nilly - Apr 27, 2003 9:11:09 am PDT #1188 of 10001
Swouncing
Beverly, whitefonted last line:
Lili flashed a fierce grin over her shoulder. "I will until my dying day," and she was gone.
Haven't read it yet (not even the last line that I posted - the advantages of English not being my mother tongue), but bookmarked it for later.
Connie Neil - Apr 27, 2003 9:18:39 am PDT #1189 of 10001
brillig
Yeah, that looks like the end there, and a very good end indeed.
§ ita § - Apr 27, 2003 9:51:49 am PDT #1190 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.
Score!!!!
Sorry.
It is truly a lovely thing to want a story ... and then get the story.
Thank you SO much, Deena. That was beautiful.
Beverly - Apr 27, 2003 9:53:52 am PDT #1191 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Nilly, thank you for the last line. This has happened before and I need to find out what to do to fix it, so it doesn't happen again.
Deena, it's going to stay with me, you know. Those visual flashes, images that made a sharp impression, like bits of dreams remembered.
Deena - Apr 27, 2003 2:08:19 pm PDT #1192 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Beverly, thank you. You have made me absolutely gleeful! I love writing this kind of stuff and you have melted me into a puddle of gleeful goo with your reaction.
I've reposted it with some corrections, the title, and a dedication: For ita
I don't promise anything, but I do write better to assignment if anyone else is interested in a story of something mythic with a twist.
Thank you, ita, for giving me the idea. I feel so brilliant today! *g*
Rebecca Lizard - Apr 27, 2003 7:07:09 pm PDT #1193 of 10001
You sip / say it's your crazy / straw say it's you're crazy / as you bicycle your soul / with beauty in your basket
And then, I must add, t'lovely FayJay wrote a related piece: [link]
BTW, I posted my long, ex-P'thology story in my LJ.
Brynn - Apr 30, 2003 12:02:35 pm PDT #1194 of 10001
"I'd rather discuss the permutations of swordplay, with an undertone of definite allusion to sex." Beverly, offering an example of when your characters give you 'tude.
Hi, I just wanted to post a quick thank you to Deb G. for all her help with editing (I would email, but Bremen doesn't seem to like my email server and it keeps deleting everything I send) Anyway I came out of the CW class with an A, and Deb, without your editing I'm not sure I would have.
deborah grabien - Apr 30, 2003 3:45:10 pm PDT #1195 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Whoo-hoo! Brynn, rock on.