Deena, it's marvelous! I'm awed, truly. It's very sensual, not just visual but every sense. There's a ruined innocence, a joyous sensuality tainted with the ebbing knowledge of wonders lost, which makes your title very appropriate.

I'm also pissed, because my stupid computer cuts off everything after

"Lili?

"Yes, Eve?"

"Do you still love me?"

and I can't figure out how to read the rest. Help?

Beverly, whitefonted last line:

Lili flashed a fierce grin over her shoulder. "I will until my dying day," and she was gone.

Haven't read it yet (not even the last line that I posted - the advantages of English not being my mother tongue), but bookmarked it for later.

Yeah, that looks like the end there, and a very good end indeed.

Score!!!!

Sorry.

It is truly a lovely thing to want a story ... and then get the story.

Thank you SO much, Deena. That was beautiful.

Nilly, thank you for the last line. This has happened before and I need to find out what to do to fix it, so it doesn't happen again.

Deena, it's going to stay with me, you know. Those visual flashes, images that made a sharp impression, like bits of dreams remembered.

Beverly, thank you. You have made me absolutely gleeful! I love writing this kind of stuff and you have melted me into a puddle of gleeful goo with your reaction.

I've reposted it with some corrections, the title, and a dedication: For ita

I don't promise anything, but I do write better to assignment if anyone else is interested in a story of something mythic with a twist.

Thank you, ita, for giving me the idea. I feel so brilliant today! *g*

And then, I must add, t'lovely FayJay wrote a related piece: [link]

BTW, I posted my long, ex-P'thology story in my LJ.

Hi, I just wanted to post a quick thank you to Deb G. for all her help with editing (I would email, but Bremen doesn't seem to like my email server and it keeps deleting everything I send) Anyway I came out of the CW class with an A, and Deb, without your editing I'm not sure I would have.

Whoo-hoo! Brynn, rock on.

Deb: Yeah, you go to Germany and then all the good news just-a-flows on in. Yesterday I got my CW mark via email (it seems I can receive, it's sending email that's a problem) and I learned a few days before that that I am going to be featured in the U of W (University of Winnipeg) Journal of Creative Writing Juice again this year (volume III) which is really exciting. They're actually publishing two of my pieces which is totally unexpected.. And poems at that! Things like this can inflate a girl's ego. Then again, since getting here I've discovered my German skills are not nearly as up to par as I imagined, so I could use a bit of validation.