I would change the "you" to "yourself" in the first sentence.

Maybe add something about the "values" of the company, something a little more intangible than their business.

Apart from that, good.

Shut it, Sean. This is why you'll always be climbing catwalks and not IN FRONT of the camera.

AM I ON VOX??

Thanks, Abi. Revising coming up.

Thanks, Aimee! Let's check in with Grammar Correspondent Comma King and get his thoughts. Comma?

This is Comma King, reporting live from Spike's Bitches, where local Aimee Conat is requesting help with a paragraph, already in progress.

Knowing exactly what the company does, and familiarizing yourself with their services and products, will give you the opportunity to emphasize your skills, and illustrate how hiring you would be beneficial to them.

Mrs. Conat, all of these commas are extraneous and ungrammatical, but I will defer to your stylistic choice.

Comma King, reporting.

Comma-King, can you tell us how we can better punctuate this sentence? Should we just delete all the commas? Won't that action bring about a war?

AM I ON VOX??

t flips switch

Wait.... which setting was which again?

Remember the Geneva Convention, Mrs. Conat. That sentence will read perfectly smoothly, and the commas will be home with their wives. No blood need be spilled on their behalf.

My own personal peeve, companies are entities, not people. Pronouns should be "it" not "his/her/their." "Its" website, not "their" website in:

Knowing exactly what the company does, and familiarizing yourself with their services and products

VOX = VOX

Other settings != VOX

Ok, new revision. (And let me just say, if I had had this support system in college the first two times around? I'd've been done LONG LONG AGO)

*Browsing a company’s website is one way to give yourself an edge over other applicants.* Knowing exactly what the company does and familiarizing yourself with it’s services and products will give you the opportunity to emphasize your skills and illustrate how hiring you would be beneficial to the firm. When composing your cover letter, which is the first impression you will make, you can reference a product from the website and show how your prior work experience can help further sales goals. In an interview, being knowledgeable about the company’s values can facilitate better questions from you regarding your part in customer service. It also shows a great deal of initiative, and the employer will remember that you took the time to do your research.

Oh, amych... I am sorry and hope that Lucy's passing is as easy and painless as possible for all.

In this time of dire need and sleeping husbands, I am asking for a quick Beta of the following paragraph for my discussion question today.

Kittenish stalked and killed the wild bbq chicken pizza slice. Stole it off of the counter and then spent quite a while trying to flip it over so she could get to the yummy cheese and chicken side instead of the not-so-interesting crust side. Dinner thief.