Mal: You are very much lacking in imagination. Zoe: I imagine that's so, sir.

'Out Of Gas'


Fan Fiction II: Great story! Where's the sequel?

This thread is for fanfic recs, links, and discussion, but not for actual posting of fanfic.


Juliebird - Oct 15, 2013 5:22:30 pm PDT #8740 of 10434
I am the fly who dreams of the spider

Canonically, I would say it's not a spoiler, but I can't say for sure regarding the fic.


Juliebird - Oct 16, 2013 11:26:11 am PDT #8741 of 10434
I am the fly who dreams of the spider

So that NV/SPN crossover is actually only 10,000 words, so I decided to give it a try.

So. Much. Navel-gazing. Lots of vagueness. I think I skimmed a quarter of the way through before the characters started interacting with other and using actual dialogue instead of just musing on possibilities and feelings and desires.


Juliebird - Oct 16, 2013 12:38:00 pm PDT #8742 of 10434
I am the fly who dreams of the spider

An older, heavily tattooed, broad shouldered, goateed, blonde man, dressed in typical biker gear sat with a younger, lesser-tattooed man that had a bandana tied over his hair with a number of bottles in front of them.

This particular fic is written almost entirely in this manner. IDEK. It's succinct? Cuz, y'know, that could have been a much larger paragraph . . .


§ ita § - Oct 16, 2013 12:56:08 pm PDT #8743 of 10434
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

Did "succinct" change meaning on me?


Juliebird - Oct 16, 2013 1:10:24 pm PDT #8744 of 10434
I am the fly who dreams of the spider

I meant that in the way that if the writer wanted to express all of those details, but in not such a weird way, it would have been wordier, with more sentences, and therefore less "succinct". The air quotes were there in spirit the first time around.


§ ita § - Oct 16, 2013 3:00:51 pm PDT #8745 of 10434
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

I think the author should consider the value of those details. I'm sleepier already.


§ ita § - Oct 20, 2013 12:30:12 pm PDT #8746 of 10434
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

Sometimes it's clear that it's not simply a matter of hitting F7.

The room was too small, that’s the first thing Castiel noticed when he pushed the wooden door open. It was to small for him, to small for two people.

With a sigh he doped his bags to the floor, looking at the beds on the right and left walls. One sported a maroon quilt and tan sheets, as well as a couple of pillows. The chest at the end of the bed was overflowing with clothes and other belongings. A poster for a band Castiel didn’t recognize hung on the wall. The bed to his left, his no doughtily was bare. No comforting pillows or blankets, no recognizable posters.

He sat on the edge of his bed, putting his hands over his pale face. 1, 2, 3, 4, 5. He counted in his head until he got to 60, a minuet had past and he as okay, wasted he? He was still here, breathing, living. He probably did this to often; it was a way of keeping himself calm, put together.


brenda m - Oct 20, 2013 12:34:39 pm PDT #8747 of 10434
If you're going through hell/keep on going/don't slow down/keep your fear from showing/you might be gone/'fore the devil even knows you're there

No doughtily.


§ ita § - Oct 20, 2013 12:37:01 pm PDT #8748 of 10434
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

No diggity.


Juliebird - Oct 20, 2013 12:52:09 pm PDT #8749 of 10434
I am the fly who dreams of the spider

No doubt.

I liked the recently read sentence "the two empty seats were occupied by...".