I'm pretty sure Momoa mentioned that, though the panels are starting to blur together. He did delight in reminding McGillion that his character was dead.

the above story certainly has the hot boysex aplenty. But still - it's a cracking piece of writing

I think I would have liked the story better if it had been gen. There was something about the structuring that managed to imply "I stole a city for my hot boyfriend," which tended to trivialize the otherwise deadly-serious plot.

Actually there are a couple of things I'd criticize in the story, in the deep structure and in the assumptions, but mostly what I want of the story is for it to be more ambitious. Which says good things about the story overall, you know? It engaged me enough that I wanted it to be even better. (I haven't figured out a polite way to write that in feedback format.)

I think I would have liked the story better if it had been gen. There was something about the structuring that managed to imply "I stole a city for my hot boyfriend," which tended to trivialize the otherwise deadly-serious plot.

I think I see where you're coming from, even though I totally and utterly disagree. (But by way of disclaimer, the list of stories I find to be improved by being gen is... um... I had one or two written down somewhere in case the question ever came up.)

Anyway, for me, the hot boysex didn't distract from the story, because of the way it felt like the whole plot was really kicked into motion by the way Sheppard's emotional loyalties run so much deeper than the attitudinal flyboy the Air Force and SGC take him for. Which applies to the team, not just the pairing, and ultimately to the way the city is reborn. And because it all unfolds out of that core, the hot boysex is TOTALLY NOT GRATUITOUS LALALALA.

I think I would be more willing to subscribe to your newsletter if, e.g., any of the other characters (i.e. the 124 other people) had been given agency or action. Like, a whole bunch of brilliant weirdoes were all satisfied to transition to what amounts to a monarchy, without argument? There were never any policy disagreements?

The lesson of Fletcher Christian, to pick one famous mutineer, is the lesson that once you've had one mutiny, it's not too hard to have more. You don't just automatically make a City upon a Hill, not without a lot of caucusing and rancor and hardship in addition to luck.

I think I must be a glass-half-full kind of ficreader, then. I followed a link with no particular expectations (hadn't even registered it was Speranza until I got to the end) and was just delighted with all the historical 'quotations' and citations and bibliography and all that jazz. But I can see the validity of your criticisms.

My only quibble with the story was how did they deal with the Wraith armada after expending so much energy on the SGC ships? Yes, John used the big ass bomb, but that seemed a bit handwavy.

edit: Plus I felt a bit, well, snubbed by the bits at the end in languages I didn't know, as if we weren't worthy to know those parts of the story. I know it was a mechanism to show how Atlantis became truly part of Pegasus and not of Earth, but I wanted to know what it said.

Speranza just posted in her LJ saying that there is no translation of the two bits at the end of the story.

(But by way of disclaimer, the list of stories I find to be improved by being gen is... um... I had one or two written down somewhere in case the question ever came up.)

I will cling to readers like you when my first choc_fic story posts.

Because really, it COULD have been gen, and taking it to slash involved a subplot, but there was a slash in the prompt! And, well, damn it...

I'd missed writing blow jobs

choc_fic? hmm? took me a minute. remembered. yay!

Also:

there was a slash in the prompt!

An obvious case of punctuational determinism! How could you be expected to do otherwise?

yay blow jobs!

[link] Choc_Fic.

AKA, a challenge of AWESOME.

An obvious case of punctuational determinism! How could you be expected to do otherwise?

I was helpless before it! It couldn't be helped!