Her hands held on to the chair as she bounced rapidly on the hard rod that slid in and out of her very wet hub.
That is one of the least sexy bits of imagery ever. It sounds like they're assembling IKEA furniture and using too much WD-40.
Okay, um, I'm lost. Uh, I'm angry, and I'm armed, so if you two have something that you need to work out --
Mal ,'War Stories'
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Lyra Jane - Jun 29, 2005 4:35:23 am PDT #346 of 10434
Up with the sun
sumi - Jun 29, 2005 6:09:27 am PDT #347 of 10434
Art Crawl!!!
LJ! Bwah!
askye - Jun 29, 2005 8:32:32 am PDT #348 of 10434
Thrive to spite them
Reading that makes me wonder what horrible-ness she'll come up wtih next.
I keep expecting something like:
She was a carnival of emotions --- her desire strobbed through her like a ferris wheel. Her mind dizzy like too many trips on the tiltawhirl as he slid his joy rod into her happy fun spot.
Dana - Jun 29, 2005 9:11:43 am PDT #349 of 10434
"I'm useless alone." // "We're all useless alone. It's a good thing you're not alone."
Oh, I sense a competition looming. The worst bad-Nikita-writer-like similie/metaphor you can come up with.
Dana - Jun 29, 2005 9:15:25 am PDT #350 of 10434
"I'm useless alone." // "We're all useless alone. It's a good thing you're not alone."
She thrummed like a subwoofer and begged him to strip her speaker wires. He pulled out his multi-purpose tool and lubricated it, proving who was her handyman.
askye - Jun 29, 2005 9:24:20 am PDT #351 of 10434
Thrive to spite them
Their desire pierced her like a sandsupr, sharp but relief when he kissed her, hot like sand. She cried out, her voice like an eagle. Her wetness oozed around him as he murrmered, "My sweet mermaid" and a tsumani of passion crested over her.
Gris - Jun 29, 2005 9:30:22 am PDT #352 of 10434
Hey. New board.
That Doctor/Rose thing is very Bwah!
Deena - Jun 29, 2005 10:07:02 am PDT #353 of 10434
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
His molten gaze set off a bomb in her womb. His massive tool split her over and over, shaking her to her atomic core. They imploded as one being in a great mushroom cloud of desire.
Katie M - Jun 29, 2005 10:27:04 am PDT #354 of 10434
I was charmed (albeit somewhat perplexed) by the fannish sensibility of many of the music choices -- it's like the director was trying to vid Canada. --loligo on the Olympic Opening Ceremonies
Oh, that's good.
askye - Jun 29, 2005 10:29:15 am PDT #355 of 10434
Thrive to spite them
Their cupoling was a build up of passion, Nikitia longed for the release that, as a BASE jumper, she knew would be like free fall. Michael was her parachute.
Her passion built and grew, Michael kissed her, laved her skin until she rithed on the sheets, soft as down. Nikita moaned, low and long. She was gushing between the white pilars of her legs, Michael hovered over her, his stiff, solid column readying to plunge within her. He plunged again and again, like a jet blast his pent up passion rocked her rotunda.