The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
How does J disarm F? He's the younger and stronger of the two, so I think if he gets a good grip on F's knife hand, he can prevent him from doing any more damage, but how does he make him drop the knife? Should I have that happen before J knocks F down?
I'm pretty sure you need to hunt ita down for exact details, but I vaguely recall a friend/instructor in the Russian martial arts class I took ages ago leading us through disarming someone with a knife or handgun, and there are a couple of fairly simple wrist-and-finger holds you can do that will not only turn the weaponed person's fingers to jelly but often drive him to his knees.
I know it's both possible and not incredibly difficult once you've got the training, but I have no clue as to exactly how it works. But ita probably knows twenty variations on it.
eta:
Discovering that Fight Scenes are Much Tougher Than Sex Scenes, Probably Because I've Had Sex but Have Never Killed a Man With My Bare Hands
Best. Signature Line. Ever.
Of course, ita would know! I'll xpost with Natter tomorrow. Am too tired now, having just wrestled my to-do list into submission, and with my bare hands, at that.
Best. Signature Line. Ever.
Heh. I try to amuse. Anyway, I figure it's probably true of most of my readership, too, so it won't be quite as obvious if I get it wrong. OTOH, if I'm going to write military fiction a la Bernard Cornwell, I'm sure I'll get readers with military training who could spot hand-to-hand combat errors a mile away and would point and laugh if I just made it all up.
Not ita, but a fair amount of practice disarming people with knives.
If you whack the center back of the knife hand with the heel of your hand (ideally same side - if he's holding the knife in his right, use your right from behind or to the side) his grip will open. If you do it hard enough the knife will go flying, but this is unlikely when the fight's gone to the ground.
Any combination of limbs can pin and twist the knife arm - if you pronate his kinfe hand sufficiently, his grip will open and you can take the knife. Most honorable (or law-fearing) people will throw the knife away at that point, rather than sticking it in their attacker.
A good technique is to make him think about something else while you isolate the knife: Stick your fingers in his carotid or eyes; hit him off the point of the jaw with your elbow; put a boot heel in his face as you put your legs over his chest (you're both lying on the ground) and crank his knife arm up over your chest (between your legs), bending it back over your chest. This can pop his elbow out of socket or break his arm, which renders the knife moot. You can capture the knife between your ribs and upper arm in this or other moves also, pinning it and turning away to remove it from his grasp.
It's usually only in fanfic porn that I have this much trouble imagining a position.
I second Raq's general recommendation of joint manipulation, but I'd also add that the blow-by-blow can be handwaved a bit once you have the general outlines of what happens solid in your own mind -- you don't want to get it wrong, because, yes, then the boring military types will come after you, but it's the kind of description where every. single. move. can get really technical and ultimately kill the action in a way that the rest of your audience may be quite happy to skip. So, our hero gets the dude's knife arm bent back and makes him drop the weapon, and then we can cut to the
real
point of the scene, which is the existential horror of watching the dude's eyes go dead under his very own hands. And that part, I know you can write.
(Think of the difference between a sex scene with lots of breathless suggestion, and one that's got every bit of insert tab A in slot B.)
(Also, if you're a Deadwood fan, there's
a terribly brutal hand-to-hand fight
in season 3 (hey, DVD's are out, and it's y'all's fault if you highlight!)
episode 5 that addresses some of the same questions you're working with. Must be viewed with the commentary from the actors on their own process of getting to the place you're talking about.
)
It's usually only in fanfic porn that I have this much trouble imagining a position.
Having tried and failed at both the porn and the fighty-fighty? The porn is easier.
I think my attempt at describing the insert-tab-a-into-slot-b both speaks to askye's point about not detailing it, and to why I'm not a writer.
But, here's a photo, or series of: [link]
Oh, okay, I see. I thought Tab A was sitting on Slot B's chest at the time.
Thanks so much, y'all. The scene is rewritten, with a choreography assist from DH (who helpfully pointed out all the ways I'd left J vulnerable in my first attempt at disarmament).
Well, I had the first installment of The Eclectic Word last night. And I gotta say, I can get used to this Internet radio thing. It was a lot of fun.
Last night's show can be downloaded now, and on Sept. 7th I have Allyson and Jilli. Which may be trouble ... (: