Yes. Very first. Written last week, looked at little until today.
Personal, with some things explicit, that were personally implicit. I'm sure I'll have to cut a little deeper to get it where I want it, but I'm poking to see where it hurts.
Can't drink, smoke, diddle my willy. Doesn't leave much to do other than watch you blokes stumble around playing Agatha Christie.
Spike ,'The Cautionary Tale of Numero Cinco'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Daisy Jane - Oct 01, 2006 5:18:47 pm PDT #8429 of 10001
"This bar smells like kerosene and stripper tears."
deborah grabien - Oct 01, 2006 5:21:39 pm PDT #8430 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
As I say, it's very vivid - but my own feeling is that it's still very oblique.
Which is fine, if you're writing it strictly for you. As a member of the readin audience, though, the oblique can be a bit of a barrier.
Daisy Jane - Oct 01, 2006 5:24:04 pm PDT #8431 of 10001
"This bar smells like kerosene and stripper tears."
No you're right. Again, still having trouble with the naming of things.
deborah grabien - Oct 01, 2006 5:29:56 pm PDT #8432 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Yep. The question of obliqueness becomes the limit on ithe piece's accessibility to the reader.
Aw jeez, I sound like a frickin' writing instructor, or something.
I swear, I am NOT trying to sound pompous....
Daisy Jane - Oct 01, 2006 5:52:58 pm PDT #8433 of 10001
"This bar smells like kerosene and stripper tears."
No, I appreciate it. And edited back up top to be more explicit.
deborah grabien - Oct 01, 2006 6:13:43 pm PDT #8434 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Oh, hell yes. Waaaaaay more of a doorway into that, and way less timid. A lot of the obscuring film is off.
Typo:
forked-tounged
Please to fix.
Daisy Jane - Oct 01, 2006 6:21:24 pm PDT #8435 of 10001
"This bar smells like kerosene and stripper tears."
Thank you ma'am.
erikaj - Oct 01, 2006 6:35:29 pm PDT #8436 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Aw, shucks. Cause I just finished an episode of The Wire, which I love deeply for something that tells me I can't write for shit every week. "Hey, rookie. Gimme quarter."
Daisy Jane - Oct 01, 2006 6:42:46 pm PDT #8437 of 10001
"This bar smells like kerosene and stripper tears."
which I love deeply for something that tells me I can't write for shit every week.
Again. Devoured the thread in a week. I beg to differ, and I have proof.
Lee - Oct 01, 2006 7:42:54 pm PDT #8438 of 10001
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.
In preparation for the next drabble topic, give me a word, any word...