Not a Drabble, or even on topic, but here. For your amusement. Or mocking - which ever.

Bored - A Poem

Bored am I.
I am Bored.
Time needs to pass
more quickly, Lord.
There isn't enough
to keep me busy.
Customers are few;
I'm going crizizzy.
I'm usually swamped,
with cars to loan.
Today I have neither
and no ringing phone.
No book to read,
no emails need response,
so I compose this bad poem,
and keep my boredom ensconced.

Thankyewverymuch.

Sail, I have to confess....I don't understand what's going on in your drabble.

BWAH! Good morning, empress, and may I suggest one small change, for rhythmic flow?

Tep, the picture I got from Sail's was her and a guy, playing an ongoing video game, her being better at it than the guy was, her feeling the need to somehow excuse that she was better at it than he was.

The scores started diverging, she began apologising.

That was the picture in my head, anyway.

BWAH! Good morning, empress, and may I suggest one small change, for rhythmic flow?

Please.

That's what I got from Sail's drabble also, along with the idea that her trivia scores were going to make her unwelcome in the In Crowd.

Dialogue's tough. It's double-tough. Characters can't talk like people really talk (proven to me by recording every conversation around me for a couple days), and yet to be realistic they can't say exactly what they are thinking/feeling either.

"There isn't enough
to keep me busy.
Customers are few;
I'm going crizizzy.

For the scan (scansion?):

There's not enough
to keep me busy
few customers
I'm going crizzizzy.

Keeps the two-two rhythm. Why yes, I have been writing a book section dealing extensively with bembe drumming and the clave rhythms Bo Diddley made famous...

Characters can't talk like people really talk (proven to me by recording every conversation around me for a couple days)

Huh. Mine do. I read every chapter section aloud. Specifically in the Kinkaids, JP's voice is very much the voice of the man I remember, and I want it stone dead perfect, his voice. So far, so good; my friends and family who knew him are all agreed on that. My sister read a few paragraphs on London Calling, misted up, and said "That just really brings him back - I miss him."

So they can, but it's tricky.

I like that much better, Deb. Thank you.

I didn't mean voice exactly, deb. That definitely needs to be real. I meant filling the page with "um..uh...yeah, it's like, you know...I had this thing - hang on. Yeah, I had this thing that was um like this big, and I don't know, um, where it could've gone...uh, what's the word for a thing that, you know"

You can do that for a character, to make a point and draw the character, but doing it for everybody would drive readers nuts.

Although, it's possible that I am surrounded by particularly poor speakers.