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Oh, hell. I forgot about the topic, what with all the hurricane and everything. All right, then -- good idea, Deb!
Challenge #72 (dancing) is now closed.
Challenge #73 is rain, in honor of Hurricane Katrina (that bitch).
As always, feedback makes the world go round, and suggestions for future drabble topics make Teppy go yay.
Blade Runner
"...all these moments...
It's possible I made a mistake, coming to see this. I had an instinct: come alone. I didn't know why. Now I do.
...will be lost...
Roy Batty's dying, his six-year replicant lifespan over. It's six years since I left, six years of denial, trying to bury things, failing, denying the failing. It's about memory, this movie, about what makes us alive if our memories are stolen, or forcefed. It's a kick in the heart.
...like tears...
I leave the theatre, tears drying on my cheeks, into a cloudburst of passion I want to recover.
...in rain."
I Like Pina Coladas
The black streaks ran down her cheeks and into the corners of her mouth; the look was past raccoon and into harlequin makeup. Looks like she forgot to wear the waterproof mascara today.
My boots splashed among the puddles left by the rain. Slick oil rainbows in them reflected street lights become twinkling stars on their surface. The clean smell of rain-washed air filled lungs that had labored in the oppressive pre-storm humidity; being outside felt good.
Too bad for the breathless girl on the ground. Her puddles ran red with the blood from the hole in her left temple.
Sail, one suggestion? I think you might want to hyphenate "pre-storm". I read it twice as "PRES-torm" and wondered what it meant....
I debated on that. I think you may be right, spellchecker didn't recognize it as a word, either.
Not sure why it triggered visual dissonance - maybe because we have two consonants surrounded by vowels? "es-to" is the way my eye breaks that, for balance.
So, I saw pres-torm.
I've done that before with other words, deb. Totally understandable as far as I'm concerned. I went back and edited the drabble to put the hyphen in.
BWAH! I like "remove from your lexicon".
"You wish" made me giggle.