If the apocalypse comes, beep me.

Buffy ,'Selfless'


The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...  

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Connie Neil - Jun 21, 2005 7:48:04 am PDT #2869 of 10001
brillig

I wonder if "it grieves me" is a Southern thing.


sfmarty - Jun 21, 2005 7:48:18 am PDT #2870 of 10001
Who? moi??

A friend of mine has been writing a story for years. She edits and edits and edits. I suspect she is still on chapter one.


Amy - Jun 21, 2005 7:50:11 am PDT #2871 of 10001
Because books.

I also edit as I go, but it helps get me back into the story the next day. I read previous day's work, edit and polish, and then start the new stuff. Works for me.

I've heard "it grieves me", connie.


deborah grabien - Jun 21, 2005 7:54:27 am PDT #2872 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

I've heard it "it grieves me" all my life. What I've never heard before is "I grieve you."

So, someone is dying, I'm standing over their bed. I might say "I will mourn you". It wouldn't occur to me to say "I will grieve you."


Connie Neil - Jun 21, 2005 7:57:42 am PDT #2873 of 10001
brillig

I don't know the real grammatical terms, but I don't think I've hard forms other than "X grieves me" or "he grieves for". Active form? Passive, because something else receives the action? Present tense? Third-person as the subject of the verb? I can put together a kick-ass sentence, but I wouldn't be able to describe it technically under threat of torture.


Steph L. - Jun 21, 2005 7:58:19 am PDT #2874 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism

I've heard "it grieves me", connie.

It's in the Giles/Tara duet from OMWF.


Connie Neil - Jun 21, 2005 7:59:19 am PDT #2875 of 10001
brillig

It's in the Giles/Tara duet from OMWF.

Oh, thank god! It was going to haunt me all day and I'd end up scanning every song sung by a woman in my play list.


Steph L. - Jun 21, 2005 8:01:47 am PDT #2876 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism

It's actually "It'll grieve me / cause I love you so...."


SailAweigh - Jun 21, 2005 8:11:23 am PDT #2877 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb

Death is His Gift

The lab is cool and smells of antiseptic. We file in one by one, like altar boys being herded into line for a procession, scuffing our feet along the worn linoleum tile. A silver colored container the size of a coffin sits there with its lid off.

He stares up at us, the lack of eyelids lending him a surprised air. We stand there, momentarily, in apparent supplication and silently beg his forgiveness for treating him like a piece of meat behind the butcher’s counter. Then, we touch him, carefully, reverently, as this gift deserves while we learn from him.


Liese S. - Jun 21, 2005 8:12:35 am PDT #2878 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."

Huh.

No idea. I probably meant "grieves for," but it didn't ping me when I reread, so maybe I do use it that way. I dunno.

It woulda helped, 'cause I ended up at 99 and had to stick in the "so" in the last line. I think, anyway, 'cause I hand-counted this one.

I also noticed that I inadvertently rhymed again in the closing sentence. Whoops. Heh.