Cash, just borrow some of Jilli's words, she ran over. And you're both talking about night, kinda. It should work, just like a Mad Libs book.
Yeah, but you're an amateur fry cook and I come from a long line of fry cooks that don't live past 25.
Buffy ,'Showtime'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
SailAweigh - May 09, 2005 2:26:59 pm PDT #1977 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
deborah grabien - May 09, 2005 3:02:08 pm PDT #1978 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
smelted in the furnace of her soul
Do you know, it's really really really really REALLY frellin' nice to have a break from writing angst?
This topic is making me so damned happy...
edit: any bets on who uses the phrase "swooning, half-carried away on the tide of passion" first? Because I may be tapped out on bad for a day or two, over here. That shit is really tricky to write.
Steph L. - May 09, 2005 3:10:09 pm PDT #1979 of 10001
the hardest to learn / was the least complicated
The desert lay before him, on the other side of the steering wheel. It was a big desert. Big and empty and dry. Like his heart.
"Good," Jake thought, throwing a cigarette butt out the window into the hot, scorching air of the empty desert. "This desert is the only place I belong right now."
He knew his sensitive soul wouldn't be able to survive in a place teeming with other people's emotions, assaulting him with every breath he took, every thump of his heart. No, he needed this broiling hot vista, because it was empty.
So he drove on.
[[100 words exactly!]]
deborah grabien - May 09, 2005 3:12:35 pm PDT #1980 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Teppy, it needs a name.
I'm thinking "Desert."
Steph L. - May 09, 2005 3:14:09 pm PDT #1981 of 10001
the hardest to learn / was the least complicated
I'm thinking "Desert."
Heh. That wouldn't be too subtle? I mean, I want people to *feel* the metaphor of the desert, man....
deborah grabien - May 09, 2005 3:20:59 pm PDT #1982 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
(I may have to leave town after this one. This one's for erika. With apologies to Dashiell and also to Mr. Chandler...)
Framed
She was hotter than the Sunset Grill that time the cook spilled the sterno. Curves, smoky voice - everything about her yelled sex, but there was ice in her wounded bunny eyes.
Her lips trembled as I poured her a shot of rye from the flask in my desk drawer. "So what's your beef, sweetheart?"
"Call me Jessica." The story poured out, same old story I hear every day. Cheating husband, empty bank account, evidence. She needed a PI. She wrote me a retainer.
"I'll call you when I have something." I glanced at her signature, and added, "Mrs. Rabbit."
SailAweigh - May 09, 2005 3:42:02 pm PDT #1983 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Oh, rassenfrassensnifsnaf, you guys are killing me! There's no way I can ever write that bad. Guess I'm going to have to learn to write better first, so I can learn how to even write bad well.
Cashmere - May 09, 2005 4:07:06 pm PDT #1984 of 10001
Now tagless for your comfort.
I'm finding that it's actually more difficult to write really badly.
Strix - May 09, 2005 4:21:27 pm PDT #1985 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
I agree, Cashmere, but it's fun. I was snorting as I ended mine.
Hee.
SailAweigh - May 09, 2005 4:22:25 pm PDT #1986 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
I'm noticing that writing bad is where style comes in. There's more than one way to write badly. (And I probably just broke a grammar rule there that is also a form of "bad" writing, but some of the rules confuse me. I need a remedial.) It's not just being over-prosey with the adverbs, it's also stating the obvious, over and over. I just can't seem to do that, something in my brain resists. Must.Try.Harder.