Your idea for four pursuers is good, because it's obvious Anna's going to have to pull the trigger in that scenario. Plus, if she only wings somebody, Jack can praise her for having the courage to shoot at all, then offer to help her learn to aim properly.

I'm rather of connie's mind on this one, and also agreeing with Robin's suggestion. Add to the tension between them whenever possible, and certainly the "Is he coming back? Bringing reinforcements?" scenario is a tension-adder.

or you could leave the question open as to where he is and have him show up later.

I don't want to go that route because I want them to be able to relax a bit not too long after this scene, because this is the phase of the story where they first have The Sex, and they're not the type to stop for sex right in the middle of running for their lives. I mean, they're in love, and in lust, but they're not stupid.

(Annabel's dinnertime. Back later.)

I'd think if one guy runs off hellbent for leather in one direction, and they go off in another direction, they could find a minute to relax not too long afterward. Especially in a cave, where they're not likely to be seen.

One of the agents I queried wrote and said she'd love to read what I've got, and to send it along.

Prepared for the worst, hopeing for the best, and will take all the luck you can send.

Luck! Allyson.

Well, they're not actually going to have sex in the cave--that'd be too soon. It is, however, when all vows of "we must obey all the rules and never for a moment forget who and what we are" start to break down.

Also, note that I couldn't spell "hoping" correctly. Gah I'm nervous.

HMOG Allyson, that's great!