She didn't even touch her pumpkin. It's a freak with no face.

Willow ,'Help'


The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...  

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Susan W. - Feb 21, 2005 12:05:21 pm PST #169 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights

Do you ever do scene breaks within a chapter? (I feel like I should know this, but I can't remember.)

Yep, I do. And if I'm switching POV, even if it's a continuous scene, I always put in a line break to prepare the reader for the transition.

I think I'm just gonna try it. If it doesn't work, I can just take it out.


erikaj - Feb 21, 2005 12:20:28 pm PST #170 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

I'm having trouble setting up my clues, y'all. How big should they be? Because the last thing I want is to create a giant "No! Duh." But the days when a broken cigarette can solve(excuse me, put down) a case are long dead.

Witness: Are you going to look for clues?
Detective Howard: The body in the basement is sort of a big clue.
And I know my P.I. can't be present for everything that happens with the police investigation, but her brother is a patrol sargeant...maybe she can nag Little Bro. She also made a "connection", in Xander-speak with the guy that caught the case, but he can't give her too much info, right?


erikaj - Feb 21, 2005 12:41:13 pm PST #171 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

cereal: How many red herrings? It's partly my own fault for giving this thing a cast the size of Guam, but you know...I know a lot of folks and they know a lot of people, so that feels real, but I don't know how to manage them.


Scrappy - Feb 21, 2005 12:42:39 pm PST #172 of 10001
Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it.

A couple of red herrings are nice.


erikaj - Feb 21, 2005 12:52:06 pm PST #173 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

I suppose. They call 'em whodunnits not dunkers, right? For those few not Homicide-literate, a dunker is like, well, two cowboys having a shootout or something...the one not on the ground did it. A guy running around in a bloody shirt saying "And I'd do the bitch again!" Dunker. Only people like me read those books.


Gus - Feb 21, 2005 1:11:19 pm PST #174 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.

(half a drabble)

Cowboy on the ground in Mainstreet. Gun-fanning opponent stands with smoking gun, black hat tilted, silver gleaming.

Homicide cop dunks doughnut, observes to partner: "Winchester on Stable rooftop, right?"

Partner: "Heart attack."

HC: "Suppose we'll have to examine the body to settle this."

Partner: "What is this? CSI? He's dead. Pass the crabs."


erikaj - Feb 21, 2005 1:34:43 pm PST #175 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Hee, hee. "Got yourself a stone dunker, bunk." Definite black under your name.


Steph L. - Feb 21, 2005 2:26:54 pm PST #176 of 10001
Unusually and exceedingly peculiar and altogether quite impossible to describe

Drabble-y drabble time!

Challenge #45 (heart) is now closed.

Challenge #46 is very unstructured: describe something small. And by "something," it doesn't have to be something tangible.


Pix - Feb 21, 2005 5:25:00 pm PST #177 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie

The ship looked huge when we first walked across the bridge and into the atrium. I remember looking up and drinking in elevators that seemed to stretch up forever.

And now, the waves aren't bad, for the ocean. They tilt us from left to right, rock gently, lurch lightly. Buck and roll and dip back down, so subtle sometimes it is barely noticable. But my body, always so trustworthy at sea. always so in love with the movement of the water, rebels this time. It yearns for stability and solid ground. It longs for land.

There's not enough space. I can't breathe. This whale is too small.


Jesse - Feb 21, 2005 6:18:29 pm PST #178 of 10001
Sometimes I trip on how happy we could be.

After all the apartment talk in Natter, I had to...

I moved in sight unseen, paying twice the price for half the space as I had before. But it had high ceilings and a beautiful wood windowsill. The walls had been painted by the previous tenant, purple opposite exposed brick, yellow behind the kitchenette, green in the bathroom. I gave the “grand tour” standing still – the back wall was the kitchen; my bed, taking up half the floor space, was my bedroom; the new chair facing the tv was my living room. I moved into that apartment with no money and no job, happier than I had been in years.