Ohhh, I want more.
I have a minor quibble--I don't think Cynthia would step all the way out from behind her brother, no matter how mesmerised she was. Partly, maybe. Leaning, peering. But she doesn't sound ready to step all the way out.
That said, I still want more.
Seriously. Dean and kids just make me all heart-melty.
Thanks, That was the easy bit. Amy is going to help me with the hard stuff. My sister's going to help me with the lore, as will my parents.
I plain don't remember how to write a whole story.
I would definitely want to see more of this, ita.
I second the Dean and kids all melty part.
I'm up to 4800 words now. It's getting real. Of course, Amy could beat it all to hell, but that's what's poured from my head so far.
I'm being helpful and encouraging! Or I will be tomorrow.
I reread so much old beloved fic tonight, my head is swimming.