Those aren't serial commas. A serial comma (why are they also called Oxford commas?) is the comma just before "and" in a list of more than two items (e.g. in "my parents, god, and ayn rand" the serial comma is the second comma of the phrase). Those are just excess punctuation. You could lose half of them and improve the text.
Zoe: We're getting him back. Jayne: What are we gonna do, clone him?
'War Stories'
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§ ita § - Nov 11, 2009 10:01:45 am PST #66 of 30000
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.
Polter-Cow - Nov 11, 2009 10:02:37 am PST #67 of 30000
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!
There are no serial commas in there, Shir. But there sure are a lot of other commas, most of which are necessary. Two of them aren't. One of them is definitely wrong.
Shir - Nov 11, 2009 11:17:06 am PST #68 of 30000
"And that's why God Almighty gave us fire insurance and the public defender".
Seriously? Not even one serial comma in there? (I know not all of then were, and still).
I should really get some sleep.
Also, in case it wasn't obvious - I was going for a very direct translation from Hebrew into English, in order to keep up with the commas. Of course, it affected the whole text. It looks better in Hebrew, though.
Laga - Nov 11, 2009 12:08:49 pm PST #69 of 30000
You should know I'm a big deal in the Resistance.
In my family we call a cute little puppy dog who's trying to seem badass a "Fierce Boy-nas'-di-us". It oomes from one of us kids mispronouncing "buenas dias" but I'm not sure how it evolved to mean a cute dog trying to look mean.
Vortex - Nov 11, 2009 1:22:07 pm PST #70 of 30000
"Cry havoc and let slip the boobs of war!" -- Miracleman
with my BFF, "looking for Ed" refers to using the bathroom, and we will ask each other, "where's Ed?" to ask where the bathroom is.
it all happened when BFF was in high school, and a friend of hers, K, really had to use the bathroom, so they pulled over for her to pee on the side of the road. It happened to be near their classmate Ed's house. So, as K was peeing, she was hissing "look for ed! I do not want ed to catch us"
WindSparrow - Nov 11, 2009 1:47:11 pm PST #71 of 30000
Love is stronger than death and harder than sorrow. Those who practice it are fierce like the light of stars traveling eons to pierce the night.
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Hil R. - Nov 11, 2009 1:54:08 pm PST #72 of 30000
Sometimes I think I might just move up to Vermont, open a bookstore or a vegan restaurant. Adam Schlesinger, z''l
Had a meeting with my advisor that actually went OK. Today we were just going over math stuff, not writing stuff.
Hil R. - Nov 11, 2009 2:01:51 pm PST #73 of 30000
Sometimes I think I might just move up to Vermont, open a bookstore or a vegan restaurant. Adam Schlesinger, z''l
Oh, and I have sort of completed somewhere around 60 job applications. (I lost count a little bit, because the way I'm keeping track of them leads to a few duplicates if I try to just count. But it's somewhere between 59 and 61.)
§ ita § - Nov 11, 2009 2:05:20 pm PST #74 of 30000
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.
But it's somewhere between 59 and 61
That's a very mathy thing to say. I don't see between as =, and I'm thinking integers, so I wasn't sure why you'd written it that way, but I need to parse more flexibly.
Hil R. - Nov 11, 2009 2:17:08 pm PST #75 of 30000
Sometimes I think I might just move up to Vermont, open a bookstore or a vegan restaurant. Adam Schlesinger, z''l
Somewhere between 59 and 61, inclusive.