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This girl at school? She told me that gelatin is made from ground-up cow's feet and that every time you eat Jell-O there's some cow out there limping around without any feet. But I told her that I'm sure the cow is dead before they cut its feet off, right?
Dawn ,'Never Leave Me'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Lee - Sep 28, 2008 2:57:31 pm PDT #934 of 6687
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.
Barb - Sep 28, 2008 3:14:23 pm PDT #935 of 6687
“Not dead yet!”
Erin, this is a really intriguing piece-- is this the whole of it or is it a springboard for something bigger?
Anyhow, I like the stream-of-consciousness nature of it-- has a very "sitting on the windowsill ruminating" or as if she's watching the last of her girlfriends get married-- as if she's having this internal monologue while some moment of note is happening in RL.
When do we become women? Is it just easier to consider myself a girl, to abdicate responsibilities with this claimed title?
Wonderful line and really ties in beautifully with the final line. The only complaint I might have is that if this is the whole of the piece, a little too much of it is dedicated to Tina and blowing Marco-- it almost becomes more about her than about your narrator.
sarameg - Sep 28, 2008 6:05:56 pm PDT #936 of 6687
Doing something about it, on the other hand…now, that’s real easy to avoid. I’ve been doing it all my life
That line alone. Lines. Ouch. I mean, OUCH. That's way too familiar to me. To everyone who says knowing is half the battle? Nope, it's 5%.
Beverly - Sep 28, 2008 7:05:20 pm PDT #937 of 6687
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Allyson, I'm sorry I haven't been around. I have a window tomorrow--send me whatever you need me to look at, I'll get it back to you by COB tomorrow. Will that be soon enough?
I should have some time later in the week, too, if it's not that urgent.
Beverly - Sep 28, 2008 7:10:48 pm PDT #938 of 6687
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Erin, that's really powerful stuff.
Atropa - Sep 28, 2008 7:12:48 pm PDT #939 of 6687
The artist formerly associated with cupcakes.
stumbles into thread
I ...
I think I'm done with the manuscript. 60,485 words total. Pete is upstairs working on the art right now. (He's got another week before his deadline.)
Um. Done. This feels so weird.
Burrell - Sep 28, 2008 8:09:55 pm PDT #940 of 6687
Why did Darth Vader cross the road? To get to the Dark Side!
whoa, congratulations Jilli. That's quite an accomplishment.
Beverly - Sep 28, 2008 8:44:03 pm PDT #941 of 6687
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Jilli, you're amazing. Congratulations!
Strix - Sep 28, 2008 8:56:31 pm PDT #942 of 6687
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
Yay! Jilli! Can't wait to see it! Good job!
Barb, yes, this is all pretty much unedited beginning material for something book-length. It's not superorganized right now, but I'm just getting it down and and going over it with a very wide tooth comb and seeing if it's got legs.
Thanks, sarameg, and Beverly. Should I toss more up as I have it? I've gotten about 8 pages today, but not all of the ready for show.
Hey, look at me! I'm writing -- crazy!
Allyson - Sep 28, 2008 9:49:02 pm PDT #943 of 6687
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Thanks, Bev, insent. A whole weekend of writing, over 5k words, Chelsea Morning was a beast.
A fourth grade teacher told me it reads like Stellaluna if it had been an epic. Which was lovely. I'm half insane, BTW.